Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart and bar graph illustrates information about how public library tooks loan by different category between 2007 and 2016.
Overall, the proportion of adults was noticeable the hightest spending time in library. While, the percentage of loans took by childern's fiction and adults had been remained similar. The lowest loan was take for childern's DVD.
To begin with, the adults was spending most time in library was at 51% percent. The children spent half of the time as compare to adults. However, the precentage of teenagers were second lowest in figuer, at 15%, whereas, senior citizen spent 12%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under-length, containing only 100 words compared to the minimum requirement of 150 words. This severely limits the candidate's ability to cover all parts of the task fully. While there is an attempt to provide an overview and mention some features from the data, such as the adult membership percentage at 51% and the lowest loan categories, the information is disjointed and contains factual misinterpretations. For example, the student confuses library membership figures with time spent ('spending most time in library') and misinterprets the loan category breakdown. Because of the under-length penalty and incomplete coverage of the visual data, this falls under Band 4.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response attempts basic organization with a brief introduction and paragraph divisions, but the overall progression lacks clarity. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as starting paragraphs with 'To begin with' followed by confusing syntax. Referencing between sentences is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationships between the data points. Paragraphing is present, but the abrupt ending and lack of a well-developed conclusion hinder the logical flow of ideas. Overall, the structure is basic and errors in cohesion sometimes impede understanding, aligning with Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is very basic and repetitive. The student uses simple terms such as 'proportion', 'percentage', and 'lowest', but struggles with accurate word choice and collocation. There are several vocabulary errors that impede communication, such as 'tooks loan' instead of 'took loans' or 'borrowed items', and referring to library members as 'spending time' rather than representing demographic proportions. Spelling and morphological errors ('childern's') are also present. The vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a basic topic, but frequent inaccuracies place this in Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or attempt complex forms that result in severe grammatical errors, such as 'The pie chart and bar graph illustrates' (subject-verb agreement error), 'loans took by' (passive voice error), and 'the percentage of loans took by childern's fiction and adults had been remained similar' (tense and voice confusion). Frequent errors in punctuation, tense consistency, and sentence construction cause significant difficulty for the reader throughout the text. This performance meets the descriptors for Band 4.
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