Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts explain data about a public library named Little Chalfont in a town. Overall, the pie chart gives information about ages of library members, adults occupied larger number whereas over age adults have least number of members in library. While, the highest number of loans took in 2016 and lowest proportion of loan in 2007.
In 2016, most of the library members were adult age between 18-64 to about 51, children at second highest number at 22. Other two categories were least age group of library members 15 young adults age between 13-17 and 12 adults 65 and over.
Total loans the library had in 2016, this had highest percentage of children's fiction and adult fiction at about 38%. Other children related loans have fewest in number 6% for children's non-fiction and 1% for children's DVDs. There had only 2% loan for young adults. Furthermore, adult no-fiction and adult audio books have 13% and 2% loan in 2016.
Total number of loans between [redacted phone], there have dramatic fluctuaion in throughout ten years. In 2007 the number of loans minimum 16,000 after that there were slight increase around 18,000. Moreover, the number of loans increased in 2010 at about 21,000, the slight decrease in 2013 consist 19,000. By the passing year loan increased and reaced approximately 23,000 in 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student addresses all parts of the visual data by summarising the age of members, loans by category, and the trend in total loans over the ten-year period. An overview is attempted at the beginning, noting the main extremes such as the peak year and the lowest age group. Key features are selected and reported, such as adults aged 18-64 making up the majority of members (51) and children's fiction sharing the top spot with adult fiction at 38%. However, some data points are slightly misread or loosely reported, such as stating that total loans in 2007 were 'minimum 16,000' and reaching '23,000 in 2016' where the graph shows around 15,700 and 21,700 respectively. Despite these minor discrepancies, the overall response covers the main trends adequately, placing it securely at Band 6.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is arranged into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction followed by separate body paragraphs focusing on member ages, loan categories, and the historical trend of total loans. Cohesive devices and transition markers are used to connect ideas, such as 'Overall', 'In 2016', and 'Furthermore'. However, cohesion is at times faulty or mechanical, with awkward transitions like 'While, the highest number of loans took in 2016...' and 'Total loans the library had in 2016, this had highest percentage...'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related information, but referencing within sentences is occasionally unclear or grammatically disjointed. This level of organisation corresponds to a Band 6.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms such as 'proportion', 'category', 'fiction', and 'non-fiction'. However, there are notable word choice and collocation inaccuracies throughout the text, such as 'adults occupied larger number' instead of 'adults accounted for the largest number', 'loans took' instead of 'loans were made', and 'adult no-fiction' instead of 'non-fiction'. Spelling errors and awkward phrasing are also present, including 'fluctuaion', 'reaced', and 'least age group'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main message, the frequent inaccuracies limit the score to a Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and comparative structures. However, grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors in tense usage, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions. Examples include 'adult age between 18-64 to about 51', 'other children related loans have fewest in number', and 'there have dramatic fluctuaion in throughout ten years'. Punctuation is also problematic in places, leading to run-on structures or fragments such as 'Total loans the library had in 2016, this had highest percentage...'. Because errors are frequent and occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader, this performance achieves a Band 5.0.
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