Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates about a little chalfont library divided into four categorys, namely, children, adults, young adults, adults 18 - 64 and adults 65 and over in year 2016. While, the table shows information about total loans by category in the same year. The bar chart display the proportion of loans between 2007 and 2016. The figures are given in percentages and numbers.

Overall, adults age 16 to 64 was the largest trend and adults 65 and over was the lowest in 2016, meanwhile, children fiction and adult fiction were the highest percentage and chilren's DVDs was the least. in same year.The total number of loans between 2007 and 2006 had fluctuated.

In terms of age library members adults age 18-64 was the dominant at 51 participants. Followed by children category around 22 members. In contrast, young adults age 13-17 and adults age 65 and over made up 15 and 12 visitors repectively.

In regard to total loans by category, children's fiction and adult fiction were on the same level around 38%. Adult non fiction experienced 13% and children's non fiction at 6% was followed by adult audio books stood at 2%. Whereas children's DVDs had the lowest figure at 1%.

With respect to total numbers of loans, the figure began at 16.000 in 2007. It increased significantly to 22.000 loans in 2011. However, it slightly decreased at 19.000 in 2013, before rose gradually to 24.000 in the last year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the three charts provided. An overview is attempted, identifying extreme values and general trends. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the bar chart shows the total number of loans between 2007 and 2016, but the student mistakenly refers to the final year as 2006, and misinterprets some of the specific numerical values from the graph. The categorisation in the introduction is also slightly confused, describing the pie chart components somewhat awkwardly. Nevertheless, the main trends and proportions are adequately captured, satisfying the basic requirements of Task 1.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay is divided into logical paragraphs, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview, and separate body paragraphs for members, categories, and total loans. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall', 'In terms of age library members', and 'In regard to total loans'. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty, as seen in repetitive sentence structures and awkward transitions like 'While, the table shows' and 'in same year.The total number'. Paragraphing is present and helps structure the response, but referencing and linking across sentences require better control to achieve a higher band score.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common phrases such as 'dominant', 'proportion', and 'fluctuated'. However, there are noticeable lexical and mechanical errors throughout, including incorrect word forms ('categorys' instead of 'categories', 'chilren's'), spelling mistakes ('repectively'), and imprecise phrasing ('adults age 16 to 64 was the largest trend'). Vocabulary is sometimes repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms to describe data movement. These errors do not completely impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, punctuation, and article usage, such as missing capitalisation ('little chalfont library'), missing prepositions, run-on sentences ('in same year.The total number'), and awkward phrasing ('the figure began at 16.000 in 2007'). Complex structures are often attempted with faulty mechanics or tense confusion, such as 'before rose gradually'. While meaning is generally clear despite these errors, the high frequency of grammatical slips prevents the response from reaching a higher band.

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