Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie chart , Tabel and Bar chart illustrate the percentage and number of person of the total loans they take in the period of 2007 till 2016.
Overall, The all liabrary members take loans in the several years today i will describe the all total lons by categories.
In the loan category there is a large number of Adults in the age between 18-64 51. Childrens which is 22. Young adults 13-17 15. And adults 65 and over 15. The total loan category (2016) is children's fiction 38% , chilren's non-fiction 6% , children's DVDs 1% , Young adults 2% , Adult fiction 38% , Adult non-fiction 13% and adult audio books about 2%.
The total number of loans through the period ([redacted phone]) In 2007 the loan about 16,000 , [redacted phone]0, and there is an ups end down through all over the piriod but it ending was too high all over the periods in 2016 which is ending of the period is approximately around 22,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to cover all parts of the visual data, including the pie chart, table, and bar chart, but the information is presented rather mechanically and with several inaccuracies. For instance, the student misinterprets the age group breakdown, stating 'And adults 65 and over 15' when the chart shows 12, and confuses total members with loan percentages or numbers. While an overview is attempted ('Overall, The all liabrary members take loans...'), it is poorly structured and lacks clarity regarding the main trends. The description of the bar chart mentions an 'ups end down' and an ending of approximately 22,000, which is generally accurate according to the data (21,700 in 2016). However, the overall lack of accurate synthesis and underdeveloped comparison prevent this from reaching a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization of the response is weak. While the writer attempts to use paragraphing to separate different charts, the paragraphs are disjointed and lack clear internal logic. The opening sentence is awkwardly phrased ('The pie chart , Tabel and Bar chart...'), and cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or repetitive. The second paragraph functions as a clumsy overview but fails to logically introduce the main trends. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the mechanical listing of data points without effective transitions hinders the smooth progression of information throughout the essay.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms such as 'number', 'people', 'loans', and 'category'. There are numerous spelling errors and typos throughout the text, including 'Tabel', 'liabrary', 'lons', 'Childrens', and 'piriod'. The student attempts to use less common vocabulary like 'percentage' and 'approximately', but overall, the range is limited and inadequate for a more precise description of statistical data. Word choices are sometimes unnatural or inaccurate, which occasionally impedes the reader's comprehension.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple, fragmented, or poorly constructed sentence forms. There is a frequent lack of main verbs, resulting in incomplete sentences such as 'Childrens which is 22.' and 'Young adults 13-17 15.' Punctuation and capitalization errors are widespread, including spaces before commas and missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and after periods. Complex structures are rare and, when attempted, are grammatically flawed (e.g., 'and there is an ups end down through all over the piriod but it ending was too high...'). Errors are pervasive and frequently cause difficulty for the reader.
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