Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The give charts provides the data about a public library situated in little chalfont from the year 2007 to 2016 with the amount of loan taken each year by 4 age group.
Overall, The adults till age 64 have the higest number of members, whereas adults above 65 with the least amount of appereance, In addition, Among the 7 catagories where 2016 is at the peak with number of issued books and the lowest in 2007, The children fiction category were borrowed most of the time while children dvd's were hardly left the library.
Among the 4 age group adults between16 to 64 age had the most visite to library around 51 %, where remainign age group combianing remained less in which children at 22 %, Young adults 13-17 at 15% and adults abobe 65 at 12%. The 7 catagory in which children fiction and adult ficition were the most favoraite at 38%, followed by adult non fiction at 13%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address all parts of the visual data by mentioning the age distribution, total loans over time, and borrowing categories. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and confusing statements. For instance, the text claims '2016 is at the peak with number of issued books and the lowest in 2007', whereas the graph clearly shows 2007 started at around 15,700 rather than being the absolute lowest point or correctly tracing the trend. Furthermore, percentages are mixed up or poorly explained ('adults between16 to 64 age had the most visite to library around 51 %'). While the main features are touched upon, the lack of precision and confusing phrasing prevent the score from reaching a higher band. Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into three paragraphs, attempting an introduction and an overview. However, the internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak. Sentences are run-on and poorly linked, such as 'In addition, Among the 7 catagories where 2016 is at the peak...'. Paragraphing is disrupted by placing the overview in the middle of sentences and mixing distinct chart details together. Referencing and cohesive devices are inadequate or faulty, making the overall progression difficult to follow. Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling mistakes such as 'give' instead of 'given', 'little chalfont' with uncapitalized letters, 'higest', 'appereance', 'catagories', 'dvd's', 'visite', 'remainign', 'combianing', 'abobe', 'ficition', and 'favoraite'. There is a limited range of vocabulary attempted, and lexical errors frequently cause strain for the reader. Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are fundamental errors in subject-verb agreement ('The give charts provides'), capitalization, punctuation, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragments or run-on clauses linked incorrectly with commas, such as 'whereas adults above 65 with the least amount of appereance, In addition, Among the 7 catagories...'. Complex structures are attempted but are consistently faulty, leading to frequent errors that impede clear communication. Band 4.0.
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