Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given charts demonstrate the information about a public library in a town named Little Chalfont. It shows the trend of library member's loan between the years, 2007 and 2016.

Regarding the members, it varies from different ages. It includes children, young adults, adults and adults over the age 65. There are different categories of loans taken by library members which involves children's fiction and non-fiction, DVDs, young adults, adult fiction and non-fiction and audio books.

To begin with, total loans by category, a large proportion of people took children's fiction and adult fiction loans. In contrast, only 1% people accept children's DVDs loan. Additionally, young adults and adult audio books shoppers receive only 2% loan whereas children's and adult non-fiction category had only 6 and 13 percent loan respectively.

Moving ahead, total number of loans since 2007, swifty increased. However, it did not have constant pace of rise and fall. In the year 2016, the bar graph depicts broader number of loan i.e. 20,000 which is slightly identical in the year 2011 and 2015.

Hence, it is analyzed that in this time period fiction book borrowers are expanding over the year while DVDs are recorded minimum.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to address all parts of the task by mentioning the different charts, including the age groups, loan categories, and the overall trend of loans over time. However, the selection of data is somewhat vague and imprecise. For instance, the student states that the bar graph depicts 'broader number of loan i.e. 20,000' in 2016, which is both grammatically flawed and numerically inaccurate compared to the actual data (which shows around 21,700). Furthermore, the overview is rather weak, merely stating that fiction book borrowers are expanding and DVDs are recorded minimum, without capturing the broader picture of the dataset. Because key features are under-developed and some data points are misreported, this response fits the Band 5.5 to 6.0 descriptor range, leaning towards a 5.5 due to inaccuracies in data reporting.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response is organized into several paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body paragraphs for categories and trends, and a concluding summary. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing phrasing, such as 'Regarding the members, it varies from different ages' and 'To begin with, total loans by category'. Cohesive devices are sometimes used incorrectly or mechanically, and referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'only 1% people accept children's DVDs loan'). Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion within paragraphs lacks smoothness. This places the response firmly in the Band 5.5 to 6.0 category, where coherence is somewhat affected by faulty cohesion and referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, but contains noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and phrasing. Examples include 'people accept children's DVDs loan', 'audio books shoppers receive only 2% loan', and 'broader number of loan'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary (e.g., 'proportion', 'category', 'fluctuated' implicitly through 'rise and fall'), but these attempts are often accompanied by inaccuracies or awkward expressions. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the general topic, the frequency of inappropriate word choices and unnatural collocations limits the score to a 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The student employs a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are several noticeable grammatical errors and awkward structures throughout the text, such as 'demonstrate the information about', 'trend of library member's loan between the years, 2007 and 2016', 'total number of loans since 2007, swifty increased', and 'which is slightly identical in the year 2011'. Punctuation errors and spelling/word-form issues ('swifty' instead of 'swiftly') also occur. While communication is not entirely impeded, the high frequency of errors in complex structures pulls the score into the Band 5.5 range.

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