Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The diagram three formats present information about a public library in a urban known as Little Chalfont.
Overall, adults is the most number of age members additionally, young adults and adults 65 plus are the least number of age library members in 2016.Morever, children's dvd and adult audio books are the lowest proportion of loans had therefore, adult fiction and children's fiction were similar.
Firstly, adults age groups around 18-64 are the maximum age members in 2016 whereas, the least number of members at the age groups in young adults 13-17 and adults 65 above.Furthermore, the maximum number of loans were in children fiction and adult fiction are similar at 38% while, children non- fiction,dvds,young adults and adutls audio books these are all the lowest proportion in loan categorisized.
In addition, in 2007 to 2016 the number of loans are gradually increased from 2007 at 15,000 loan which was began whereas, the latest year 2016 is the maximum number of loans presents above 22,000. Additionally, 2009 and 2014 are equal rate of loans above 20,000 and also, 2008 and 2009 were similar level of loans below 20,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address all parts of the visual data by mentioning membership distribution, loan categories, and the overall loan trend over time. However, there are significant issues with data accuracy and expression. For example, the student states that '2009 and 2014 are equal rate of loans above 20,000', whereas the actual values on the chart are 19,000 for 2009 and 20,700 for 2014. Furthermore, the overview is rather fragmented and fails to synthesize the main trends clearly. While the student identifies key features such as the dominance of adults in membership and fiction in loans, the execution is hampered by imprecise descriptions and inaccurate data reporting. This performance aligns with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is structured into paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing different aspects of the charts. However, logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and poor sentence linking, such as starting paragraphs abruptly with 'Firstly' and 'In addition'. Cohesive devices are often used inaccurately or mechanically (e.g., 'had therefore', 'Morever'). Referencing is also confusing at times, making it difficult to follow the relationships between ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within sentences and between clauses needs considerable improvement. This reflects the characteristics of Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The student demonstrates a very limited and repetitive vocabulary, which frequently strains comprehension. There are noticeable errors in word choice and word formation, such as 'an urban known' instead of 'a town', 'children's dvd' instead of 'children's DVDs', and 'categorisized' instead of 'categorised'. Many common terms are misused or awkwardly phrased (e.g., 'most number of age members'). While the student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary related to charts and statistics, the lexical control is weak and errors are frequent. This performance fits the Band 4 descriptor, though the inclusion of some library-related terms lifts it to a borderline Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text contains frequent errors in basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions (e.g., 'adults is the most number', 'at the age groups in young adults', 'the number of loans are gradually increased'). Simple structures dominate, and attempts at more complex sentences invariably result in faulty grammar and awkward phrasing, such as 'which was began whereas, the latest year 2016 is the maximum number of loans presents above 22,000'. Punctuation is also erratic, with missing spaces after commas and periods. These persistent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and place the response firmly at Band 4.
See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.