Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The three different charts presents the data about the number of loans taken by members at Little Chalfont Library in a town between 2007 and 2016.
Overall, the library members take a highest peaked loans up to 21,000 in between this era. The highest number of loans were taken in the year 2016. Moreover, the lowest number of loans was recorded in 2007, at around 15,500. Simply, the children's fiction or an adult's fiction are two largest percent categories, each accounting for 38% of total loans.
Meanwhile, the adults between 18 to 64 ages were taking a largest figure of loans in these years. Additionly, the adults between 65 and over aged were collected a smallest percent of loans amount in between these years. Young adults 13 to 17 years old taking a 15% of loans in the year 2016 and children taking the second largest amount of loans in the last year 2016.
In Contrast, the library gives the highest amount of loans to the adults between 18 to 64 years old people. Furthermore, the library also gaves the smallest figure of a loans to the adults 65 and over.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers all three charts provided in the prompt, successfully reporting main features and making some relevant comparisons. The overview captures key details, such as the overall trend in total loans and the breakdown of categories where children's fiction and adult fiction both stand at 38%. However, there are some inaccuracies and confusions in the data reporting. For instance, the student states that 'young adults 13 to 17 years old taking a 15% of loans in the year 2016,' whereas 15% actually represents the proportion of library members in that age group, not loans. Furthermore, the overall trend description ('highest peaked loans up to 21,000 in between this era') lacks precision. While all parts of the task are addressed, the misinterpretation of data categories prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized into multiple paragraphs, attempting to separate the different charts and data sets. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and repetitive statements. For example, the student discusses adult loans in one paragraph, then returns to the same topic in the final paragraph ('In Contrast, the library gives the highest amount of loans...'), which creates redundancy rather than clear progression. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often applied inaccurately (e.g., using 'In Contrast' when continuing a similar point). Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks clear thematic unity.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for conveying basic information, featuring terms like 'proportion', 'categories', and 'record'. However, there are frequent inappropriate word choices and non-standard collocations, such as 'highest peaked loans', 'collected a smallest percent of loans amount', and 'gaves the smallest figure of a loans'. The student also struggles with word forms and prepositional usage. While there is an attempt to use less common vocabulary, the noticeable errors in word choice and morphology can cause some confusion for the reader, placing this response firmly in the Band 5 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak throughout the response. There are numerous grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The three different charts presents'), tense confusion ('were taking', 'were collected', 'taking a 15%'), and article misuse ('a smallest percent', 'a loans'). Many complex or participial phrases are faultily constructed, such as 'Young adults 13 to 17 years old taking a 15% of loans'. These frequent errors frequently distract the reader, though they rarely obscure the overall meaning entirely.
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