Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart illustrates about proportion of library members of several ages(children, young and Adults) .The bar chart compares number of loans in between year 2007 and 2016
Overall, it is clear that Adults accounted for largest share while rest of categories recorded the smallest.The table provides information about loans by category in which Children's fiction and Adult fiction recorded the highest while Children's DVDs had the lowest.
Looking first at pie chart the Adults between age 18-64 accounted for 51% of the total while Adults greater than or equals to 65 represented 12%.Children made upto 12% and young adults accounted for 15%.
Regarding the remaining categories the Children's fiction and Adult fiction represented the equal share of 38% loans whereas Children's DVDs recorded the lowest share of 1%.It is also noticiable that number of loans were considerably higher in 2016 and marked lowest in the beginning of the year 2007.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the various data sets provided in the prompt, including the breakdown of members by age and the loan categories. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data from the visual inputs. For example, the writer states that 'Children's fiction and Adult fiction represented the equal share of 38% loans', misinterpreting the table which shows 38% for each separately out of total loans, or rather misreading the proportions. Additionally, referring to a pie chart when the prompt provides a bar chart or breakdown of age members causes some confusion. The overview is somewhat general but captures main points. To reach a higher band, the student must ensure that data points and chart types are interpreted and reported with greater accuracy and precision.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs addressing specific aspects of the charts. However, logical progression is occasionally hindered by abrupt transitions and referencing errors, such as 'Looking first at pie chart the Adults...'. Cohesive devices are used sparingly and sometimes mechanically. Paragraphing is present, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be improved to ensure smoother transitions between ideas and data points. Overall arrangement shows a basic structure, but referencing and logical flow require more control to achieve a higher score.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range to communicate basic information about the charts, using terms such as 'proportion', 'share', and 'category'. However, there are frequent lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as 'Adults greater than or equals to 65' and 'It is also noticiable that number of loans...'. Spelling errors like 'noticiable' also occur. Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success and precision. To improve, the student should focus on accurate collocations, correct prepositions with percentages, and expanding their repertoire of precise reporting verbs and adjectives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'The pie chart illustrates about proportion...'. However, there are persistent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('the largest share', 'the lowest share'), incorrect prepositions ('illustrates about', 'in between year'), and punctuation/spacing issues. While the meaning remains generally understandable despite these errors, the high frequency of basic grammatical inaccuracies prevents the response from achieving a higher band score. Greater control over article usage and sentence construction is needed.
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