Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart illustrates about proportion of library members of several ages(children, young and Adults) .The bar chart compares number of loans in between year 2007 and 2016
Overall, it is clear that Adults accounted for largest share while rest of categories recorded the smallest.The table provides information about loans by category in which Children's fiction and Adult fiction recorded the highest while Children's DVDs had the lowest.
Looking first at pie chart the Adults between age 18-64 accounted for 51% of the total while Adults greater than or equals to 65 represented 12%.Children made upto 22% and young adults accounted for 15%.
Regarding the remaining categories the Children's fiction and Adult fiction represented the equal share of 38% loans whereas Children's DVDs recorded the lowest share of 1%.Finally, the number of loans increased from approximately 16,000 in 2007 to around 21,500 in 2016. Although there were some fluctuations, the overall trend was upward, with the figure reaching a peak in 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student addresses all parts of the prompt, successfully reporting the main features of the charts and table. For instance, correctly noting that adults aged 18-64 accounted for the largest share at 51% and that Children's fiction and Adult fiction tied at 38% for loan categories. An overview is provided, capturing the general trend of the bar chart regarding library loans rising from approximately 16,000 in 2007 to 21,500 in 2016. However, there is a minor mischaracterisation at the beginning where the student refers to the age breakdown as a 'pie chart' when the visual data describes it as a bar/column-style breakdown or categories within the provided mixed charts, though the data points themselves are correctly interpreted. Overall, the task is well covered with clear comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is arranged into a logical paragraph structure, moving from a general introduction to body paragraphs detailing the specific charts and table data, concluding with overall trends. Cohesive devices are used to guide the reader, such as 'Overall, it is clear that', 'Looking first at', and 'Regarding the remaining categories'. However, there are some minor mechanical errors in cohesion and referencing, such as missing articles ('the Adults', 'the rest of categories') and slightly awkward transitions between sentences. Paragraphing is present and appropriate for a short response, maintaining an overall coherent progression.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for the task, successfully employing terms such as 'proportion', 'accounted for', 'largest share', and 'fluctuations'. Less common vocabulary and precise lexical items are attempted, such as 'represented', 'category', and 'upward trend'. However, there are notable lexical slips, inaccuracies, and missing prepositions, such as 'illustrates about' (instead of 'illustrates the proportion'), 'rest of categories' (missing article), and awkward phrasing like 'greater than or equals to'. Spelling is generally accurate, but vocabulary range remains somewhat restricted to basic reporting language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response includes a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over relative clauses and compound sentences ('Although there were some fluctuations, the overall trend was upward...'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly missing articles ('the Adults', 'pie chart'), incorrect prepositions ('illustrates about', 'in between year'), and minor punctuation/spacing issues (missing spaces after periods). While these errors do not severely impede communication, they recur frequently enough to prevent the writing from achieving a higher band score.
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