Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given pie chart illustrates the proportion of the age of library members, while table and bar graph delineates the comparative data on the total number of loans. Overall, although children's and adult fiction was superior record, adults was the highest members of library.
To commence with, adults 65 and over was the lowest percentage which was about 22%, while the adults between 18 to 64 were the highest percentage which was more then half. Additionally, children was recorded 22% and young adult was recorded 15%. Similarly, children DVDs was the least record by total number of loans by categories and it was recorded 1%. Eventhough children's and adult fiction was recorded the highest percentage, both was recorded about 38%. Nevertheless, young adults and adult audio books were significantly recorded 2%.
On contrast, total number of loans was recorded 15300 in 2007 which remained fluctuated till 2016. However, it highest in 2016 which was recorded 21000. Subsequently, it was six time recorded more then 2000 and four time less than to this.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address all parts of the visual data by mentioning the pie chart, table, and bar graph. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies in the data reported. For instance, the student states that adults aged 65 and over were 'about 22%', whereas the chart shows this group accounts for 12%, while children represent 22% (the student appears to have confused the two). Furthermore, the bar graph figures are misread or miscalculated (reporting 15,300 in 2007 as 15300, and 21,000 for 2016 when the actual value is approximately 21,700). While an overview is attempted, the confusion over data values prevents the response from fully and accurately reporting the main features and comparisons. This corresponds to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organised into three paragraphs: an introduction, a body paragraph discussing membership and book categories, and a final paragraph touching on loan trends. However, the logical progression is hindered by confusing transitions such as 'To commence with', 'Similiarly', and 'On contrast'. Cohesive devices are often inaccurate or mechanically applied. Referencing is also faulty in places, such as shifting abruptly between different charts without clear signposting. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks smooth flow and clear relationships between ideas, placing this performance firmly in Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic vocabulary and direct repetition of task prompts (e.g., 'total number of loans', 'percentage', 'recorded'). There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'fiction was superior record', 'least record', and 'significantly recorded 2%'. Word formation and forms are also problematic, such as 'young adult' instead of plural 'young adults', and confusion with prepositions and comparative structures ('more then half'). While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the general topic, frequent lexical inaccuracies restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control is weak, leading to frequent errors. Examples of grammatical errors include subject-verb agreement issues ('adults was the highest members', 'children was recorded', 'both was recorded'), incorrect comparative forms ('more then half', 'six time recorded more then 2000'), and awkward punctuation. These errors occur throughout the text and occasionally impede communication, particularly when numbers and percentages are intertwined with faulty syntax. This performance aligns with the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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