Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The illustrations given depicts the information about age of members (in 2016), and loans of a library (from year 2007 to 2016), in a town called Little Chalfont.
Overall, the adults make about half the total members. However, elderly over the age of 65 accounted for the least visited members. Children and adult fiction were the most popular category for total loans, in the year 2016. Children's DVDs was the least poplular. In year 2007 least number of loans in total were given as opposed to 2016 where highest amount was given.
The pie chart shows, that in the year 2016 around 50% of the total population of library members were adults. Children accounted for around 22% of the total. Young adults in the age span of 13-17 visited around 15% and close to that were the adults over the age of 65.
The table on the other hand shows, that the percentage loans given in the year 2016. Least number of loans were given for children's DVDs, adult audio books and young adults that are in the range of 1 to 2%. The most popular category was children and adult fiction, accounting for 38% of the total loans. In the middle lies children's non-fiction and adult non-fiction where 6 and 13 % of the loans were dispensed, respectively.
In the 9 year span, around 22,000 loans were given in 2016 that was highest in the given table. Every other year almost same number of loans were given, 2007 being the exception where the number falls dramatically to about 16,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the charts and table provided. An overview is present, highlighting key trends such as the dominant adult membership group and the low figures for certain categories. The student accurately notes that adults aged 18-64 form about half the members and that children's and adult fiction share the top spot for loans at 38%. Comparisons are made where relevant, and the data is generally reported accurately, such as the peak in loans in 2016 and the dip in 2007. However, there are minor inaccuracies in reading specific proportions, such as stating young adults visited around 15% when the chart indicates 15 members rather than a percentage, but this does not severely detract from the overall coverage. Ideas are well supported by data from the visual sources, satisfying the requirements for a Band 6.5 or 7.0 response.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay is logically organised into clear paragraphs, each addressing a distinct aspect of the visual data. The introduction is followed by an overview paragraph, after which individual paragraphs cover the pie chart, the table, and the line graph respectively. Cohesive devices are used adequately to connect ideas, such as 'Overall', 'The pie chart shows', and 'The table on the other hand'. However, referencing and transitions are at times slightly mechanical or repetitive, and paragraphing could be woven together more smoothly to ensure seamless progression. For instance, the transition into the final paragraph on the nine-year span is abrupt. Overall, the arrangement is coherent and easy to follow, fitting the Band 6 descriptor well.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as 'dispensed', 'proportional', and 'dramatically'. While communication is clear, there are occasional word choice errors and unnatural collocations. For example, the student writes 'elderly over the age of 65 accounted for the least visited members', which is awkward since members are not 'visited'. Similarly, 'percentage loans given' is imprecise, and 'poplular' contains a spelling error. Despite these minor flaws, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning and meets the requirements of a Band 6.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. The student attempts complex structures, such as 'as opposed to 2016 where highest amount was given' and 'young adults that are in the range of 1 to 2%'. However, there are noticeable grammatical errors and missing articles throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The illustrations given depicts', 'adults make about half') and missing articles ('in year 2007 least number of loans'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but the frequency of minor structural errors means that while communication is not impeded, the sentences cannot be considered consistently error-free. This performance aligns comfortably with Band 6.
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