Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart give information about different ages of library members and total loans by category in 2016.
Overall, little Chalfont library had different ages of groups, adults 18-64 that's are enough to others, however, adults 65 and over are low.
Total loans by category (2016), children's fiction are higher in this category 38%, children's DVDs are 1% while adults non-fiction are 13% and young adults are 2% in this category.
Total number of loans 2007 to 2016, in 2007, the numbers are 16,000 and then in 2008 numbers rapidly increased to 19,000, after that the number stood on the same position in 2009, after that the numbers become higher 21,000 and stood on a same position, while the numbers decreased in 2012 to 2013 and then in 2014 increased and reached at 22,000, in 2016 the numbers increased and reached 23,000.
In conclusion, total numbers of loans 2007 to 2016 in the start were low after the period the number increased at 23,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers all three charts presented in the prompt, successfully reporting the main features such as the dominant adult age group (18-64), the key lending categories (adult and children's fiction at 38%), and the overall upward trend in loans between 2007 and 2016. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting the data compared to the factual reference; for instance, the writer states that in 2016 the numbers reached 23,000, whereas the chart indicates approximately 21,700. Additionally, the overview lacks a clear, cohesive summary of the broader picture, jumping directly into detailed comparisons. The response addresses the prompt sufficiently to meet the criteria for Band 6, though data precision and overview development could be improved.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The text is organized into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs for the different charts, and a brief conclusion, giving it a coherent overall arrangement. However, cohesion is often mechanical and repetitive, relying heavily on clauses joined by commas or basic transitional phrases like 'after that' and 'while the numbers'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'adults 18-64 that's are enough to others', which impedes smooth reading and logical flow. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion requires greater variety and precision to achieve a higher band score.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, with attempts to report percentages and numbers accurately. The student uses appropriate topic-specific vocabulary such as 'library members', 'loans', 'fiction', and 'non-fiction'. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'different ages of groups' instead of 'different age groups' and 'adults 18-64 that's are enough to others'. The range is somewhat limited, and spelling or lexical inaccuracies occur frequently enough to restrict the score to Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical accuracy is weak. There are frequent structural errors and run-on sentences joined improperly by commas, such as 'the numbers are 16,000 and then in 2008 numbers rapidly increased to 19,000, after that the number stood on the same position in 2009'. Errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage are also present, such as 'The bar chart give information'. While these errors do not completely obscure the meaning, their frequency prevents the writer from achieving a higher band.
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