Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Three diagrams a pie chart, a data table and a bar graph shoes data of age classes and percentage of library members, Loans by category and trends of loans from 2007 to 2016. Here i am going to elobrate each figure one by one.
Firstly there is a pie chart of memebers wich showes higest percentage 51 of adults18-64 yeras old second higest are childern were young ones typically 13-17 and older ones 65 and above are approxmetly equal in stats of 2016.
Furthermore, figure two data depicts loans fiction is 38% in loan in both childrens and adult . Adult audio books and young adult are at 2% and all other are 13% and less.
Last but not least, bar graph ranging data between 2007 to 2016 tells about the number of loans with an increasing trend in loans (20-07-2016) except for 2012-13 with minor decline in 2012 and and nearly 150 of 2013 as compare to 2011. Data from 2027 t0 2016 has little flucturation from nearly 1600 to 2200 with a differance of 600 loans.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover all three visual components provided in the prompt: the pie chart, the data table, and the line graph. However, the information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, and several key features and comparisons are omitted or misreported. For instance, the discussion of the data table lacks clarity and accurate reporting of categories such as adult fiction and children's fiction both holding 38%. Furthermore, the description of the line graph contains inaccurate figures and confused numerical references (e.g., '150 of 2013' and 'from nearly 1600 to 2200'). While the main trends are partially identified, the lack of precision and under-developed reporting place this response at Band 5.0 according to the task achievement descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which aids visual structure, but the overall progression of ideas is hindered by conversational and inappropriate opening phrases such as 'Here i am going to elobrate each figure one by one.' Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, and sometimes misused (e.g., 'Furthermore, figure two data depicts...'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the lack of smooth transitions between the different charts means the text feels disjointed rather than logically unified. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak. This level of organisation aligns with Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The lexical range is limited and frequently repetitive. The student uses basic vocabulary such as 'shows data', 'highest percentage', and 'loans'. There are numerous spelling and word-formation errors throughout the text, including 'shoes' instead of 'shows', 'elobrate', 'memebers', 'wich', 'higest', 'childern', 'approxmetly', and 'flucturation'. These lexical errors and limitations cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted vocabulary suitable for Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The essay demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences predominate, and attempts at more complex or compound sentences are frequently flawed by missing punctuation, run-on structures, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'Adult audio books and young adult are at 2% and all other are 13% and less'). Grammatical errors are frequent, including missing articles, subject-verb agreement issues ('second higest are childern'), and incorrect prepositions. These frequent errors cause strain and difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar at Band 4.0.
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