Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given chart illustrate the information about loans of little chalfont library over the several years from 2007 to 2016.
Overall, it includes the age of library members alongside their loan categories, the adults between the age 18-64 are the major members and their loans are also highest as compared to other members which include children,young adults and adults over 65.
On the one hand , the laon categories of different age groups are mentioned with percentage.The percentage of children fiction and non-fiction is around 44% in total,and only 1% children DVDs . Futhermore, young adults loan is only 2% and the rest is of adults which are the most in number.
On the vertical bar graph, it is shown that there is a minor fluctuation of loans from 2007 to 2016. In 2007 there are almost 16000 loans which increased slightly in 2008 till 19000. After that it increased in 2010 till 21000 and than the slight changes kept coming but in 2016 the number of loans was almost the same around 21000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including member demographics, loan categories, and the trend in total loans over time. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions in reporting the data. For instance, the text states that 'children fiction and non-fiction is around 44% in total', which is correct (38% + 6%), but misses the key comparison regarding adult fiction equalling children's fiction at 38%. Furthermore, the description of the bar chart trends is slightly imprecise (e.g., stating loans were 16,000 in 2007 when the chart shows around 15,700). The overview is present but a bit simplistic. It meets the requirements of reporting the main features, but more precise referencing would elevate the score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has an overall coherent arrangement, opening with an introduction and overview, followed by body paragraphs addressing the different charts. However, paragraphing and referencing are sometimes faulty. For instance, sentences like 'On the one hand, the laon categories of different age groups are mentioned with percentage' use cohesive devices mechanically rather than logically to connect ideas, and there is no corresponding 'On the other hand'. Transitions between the demographic data, loan categories, and the bar graph feel abrupt. Paragraphs need to be structured more logically around distinct graphical elements to ensure a smoother progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, but contains several errors in word choice, spelling, and phrasing, such as 'little chalfont' (capitalisation error), 'laon' (spelling error), and 'the rest is of adults which are the most in number'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary ('fluctuation', 'minor'), but overall expression is repetitive and relies on basic terms. While the meaning is generally communicated despite the lexical slips, the range remains somewhat limited and imprecise.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'the adults between the age 18-64 are the major members and their loans are also highest as compared to other members...'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including missing prepositions ('between the age 18-64'), comma splices, and run-on sentences (e.g., 'After that it increased in 2010 till 21000 and than the slight changes...'). Punctuation is also weak, with inconsistent spacing around punctuation marks. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at band 5.0.
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