Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts below provides information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. The pie chart compare the age proportion of library memebers in 2016, which includes children, young adults, adults and adults 65 and over. The bar chart illustrates the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016. The table represents the total loans by category in 2016. Units are measured in percentage and numbers.
Overall, adults age group accounted for the largest share, whereas elderly people that is 65 and over represented the smallest proportion over the period. Furthermore, it is noteable that total number of loans dramatically surged. Children's DVDs was the lowest percentage in total loans in 2016.
On the one hand, the highest proportion of libarary memebers in 2016 adults group was highest with 51%. However, old people proportion was only 12% when compare to other age members. Furthermore, children's fiction and adult fiction proportion for loans shared the same percentage that is 38%. Addtionally, adult audio books and young adults also shared same proportion that is 2%.
On the other hand, total number of loans from 2007 to 2016 fluctuated such as in 2007 only 15,500 loans were provided, but the number of loans changed from 2011 which is 20,500. There have been slight changes in the total number of loans from 2012 to 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student covers all parts of the task by reporting on the age of library members, total loans by category, and the trend in total loans over the ten-year period. An overview is present in the second paragraph, capturing key features such as the dominant adult age group and the upward trend in loans. However, there are minor issues with data selection and accuracy; for instance, the reference to 2007 loans as '15,500' rather than the approximate 15,700, and slight confusion in categorising age groups in the body paragraphs. Nonetheless, the main features and comparisons are successfully identified and reported, satisfying the core requirements of Band 6.5 to 7.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs dedicated to different visual elements. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'On the one hand', and 'On the other hand' are employed to guide the reader through the data, although some transition choices feel slightly mechanical or forced (e.g., using 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to separate the pie/table data from the bar chart data rather than contrasting opposing points). Referencing is generally clear, though progression within paragraphs occasionally stumbles.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for task 1, successfully utilizing terms like 'proportion', 'share', 'category', and 'fluctuated'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'memebers' instead of 'members', 'noteable' instead of 'notable', and awkward phrasing like 'old people proportion'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with mixed success, and errors do not prevent the overall meaning from being communicated, aligning well with the Band 6 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including comparative structures ('whereas elderly people... represented the smallest proportion') and subordinate clauses. However, grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The charts below provides') and awkward prepositional or comparative phrasing ('when compare to other age members', 'proportion for loans shared the same percentage that is 38%'). While these errors rarely impede communication, they restrict the grammar score to Band 5.5 because error-free sentences are not in the majority.
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