Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The given illustration includes one pie chart, one table, and one bar graph, each of which represents different information on the Little Chalfont library: The pie chart illustrates the proportions of members in this library based on their ages in 2016, the table compares the percentages of loans across different categories of this library in the year 2016, and the bar graph depicts the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016.

Overall, one of the most striking features when looking at the data is that the majority of the library members were adults (18-64 years old). In addition, except for the first year, this library had around 20,000 loans annually; especially in the year 2016, most of the total loans were for children's and adult fiction books.

Looking first at the demographic illustration, in the year 2016, members whose age ranged from 18 to 64 were responsible for more than half—51%, to be exact—of the total number. Although it ranked second, the percentage of child members in this library was only 22%, which is less than half of the previously mentioned figure. Lastly, the remaining 27% was made up of young adults (13-17 years old), at 15%, and adults 65 and over, at 12%.

Moving on to the total number of loans in this library, starting at slightly more than 15,000 loans per year, this place had seen a significant increase for the next 3 years, as its figure reached more than 20,000 loans per year in 2009. From this point onwards, the data fluctuated slightly around this level until 2016, ending at approximately 23,000 loans.

Out of the mentioned number of loans, 76% were for borrowing either children's fiction or adult fiction, at 38% apiece—outnumbering the other genres of books by a wide gap. Adult non-fiction (13%), children's non-fiction (6%), young adult and adult audiobooks (2% each), and children's DVDs (1%) were responsible for the remaining portion of loans.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features, proportions, categories, and trends across the three visual elements provided. In the introduction, you accurately outline what each chart illustrates. Your overview captures the dominant demographic group (adults aged 18-64) and highlights the general consistency in loan numbers alongside the popularity of fiction genres in 2016. Throughout the body paragraphs, you extend and support your ideas with specific figures from the data, such as noting that 18 to 64-year-olds accounted for 51% of members and that children's and adult fiction each claimed 38% of total loans. To reach a higher level, you could refine the overview to provide an even sharper synthesis of the overall trends rather than listing multiple distinct points, ensuring tighter integration between the demographic data and loan patterns.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

Your response demonstrates a clear logical organisation and progression throughout. Each paragraph serves a distinct purpose, moving smoothly from a comprehensive introduction and overview into well-segmented body paragraphs focusing on demographics, loan trends by year, and loan categories. You utilise cohesive devices flexibly and appropriately to guide the reader, such as phrases like 'Looking first at the demographic illustration,' 'Moving on to the total number of loans,' and 'Out of the mentioned number of loans.' Referencing is handled effectively, ensuring that pronouns and demonstratives clearly link back to preceding ideas. Paragraphing is used sufficiently and appropriately. To achieve an even higher band, you could ensure that transitional links between the distinct visual datasets feel completely seamless, avoiding any slight abruptness when shifting from member demographics to loan history and categories.

Lexical Resource: Band 7.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary that allows for some flexibility and precision in reporting the data. Phrases such as 'proportions of members,' 'demographic illustration,' and 'outnumbering the other genres of books by a wide gap' show a good awareness of style and collocation suitable for academic writing. You also successfully employ less common items like 'fluctuated slightly' and 'accounted for' (or equivalent lexical choices). Minor lexical inaccuracies are rare, though occasionally word choices could be more academic or precise. To push into higher bands, aim to incorporate a wider variety of sophisticated, less common vocabulary and precise collocations when describing statistical changes and proportions, while maintaining natural phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 7.0

Your writing exhibits a good variety of complex structures alongside frequent error-free sentences, demonstrating strong overall control of grammar and punctuation. You successfully employ subordinate clauses, participial phrases, and compound-complex sentences, as seen in structures like 'Although it ranked second, the percentage of child members in this library was only 22%...' and 'starting at slightly more than 15,000 loans per year, this place had seen a significant increase...'. Grammar and punctuation are generally well-managed with only occasional minor slips that do not impede communication. To attain a higher band, you should focus on eliminating those persistent minor errors and increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences while ensuring absolute precision in preposition usage and verb tense consistency.

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