Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the breakdown of different age user category of library members, whereas accompanying table details the percentage of total loan by different categorie in 2016 and bar graph presents the total number of loans from the year 2007 to 2016.

Overall, it is evident that adult of ages 18-64 form the largest group of library users upto 51 whereas, adults of 65 and over account for the smallest share of 12. Meanwhile the children users were 22 and young adult of age 13-17 are 15.

In terms, of total loans category childrens fiction and adult fiction has the highest percentages of 38%, while children's DVDs and young adults and adult audio books share lowest percentage of 1% and 2%.

From the bar graph of [redacted phone] total loans the data kept fluctuating. It initated with very low of 15000 at the start of 2007 and showed significant variations and at last peaked at approximately [redacted phone].

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the main parts of the task by summarizing information from multiple sources, including the pie chart, table, and bar graph. However, some aspects are under-developed or inaccurately reported. For instance, the overview mentions that adults aged 18-64 reach a value of 'upto 51' without clarifying that this represents a member count from a specific demographic chart, while the data from the bar graph contains significant inaccuracies, such as claiming the loans 'peaked at approximately 210000' instead of around 21,700. While key features are touched upon, the lack of precision and limited extension of ideas restrict the response from achieving a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The text exhibits a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to structure the response into logical paragraphs, beginning with an introduction followed by an overview, body paragraphs for the categories, and a concluding look at the bar graph. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty. Phrases like 'In terms, of' introduce unnecessary punctuation and awkward phrasing, and the transitions between sentences can feel disjointed. Paragraphing is present and appropriate, but referencing and logical progression could be smoother to fully satisfy higher band requirements.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is minimally adequate for the task, providing an acceptable range to describe basic trends and categories. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'fluctuating', 'significant variations', and 'breakdown', but these are accompanied by notable inaccuracies in word choice, form, and collocation, such as writing 'total loan by different categorie' instead of 'categories' and 'young adult' instead of the plural form. Spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable throughout the response, though they do not completely impede communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as the introductory complex sentence using 'whereas'. However, there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that persist throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues like 'adult of ages 18-64 form' and 'adult fiction has', missing plural markers ('childrens fiction'), and incorrect prepositions or articles. Although these errors rarely completely obscure the meaning, their frequency and the limited control over complex grammatical structures keep the writing at this level.

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