Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chart elucidates information about Little Chalfont Library. The chart compares different categories and presents the data in number or percentages.

Overall, it is clear that there are noticeable among the categories shown in the chart. In addition, some categories shows fluctuations by followed increment as well as decrement whereas for some cases they remain stable.

According to the chat, the first age of library members in 2016 children 22% and young adults 13-17 age in 15%, Adult 18-64 age in 51 % in the highest, Adults 65 and over age 12% in age of library members (2016). The total loans by categories (2016) first category Children's fiction 38% , and the second category Children's non-fiction 6%, the third category Children's DVDs 1%, Four category young adults 2%, fifth category adult fiction 38%, six category Adult non-fiction 13%, at the end seven category Adult audio books in 2% and the total loans by( 2016).

Total number of loans ([redacted phone]) The first year in [redacted phone]0 loans , 2008 in 18000 loans , 2009 in 18500 loans , 2010 in 21000 loans , etc at [redacted phone]0 in number of loans

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the prompt by mentioning information from the charts regarding Little Chalfont Library, but it does so only minimally and tangentially. While it presents some figures from the data, such as the percentages for the age of library members and loan categories, it fails to provide a clear or accurate overview of the main trends. Furthermore, the descriptions are disjointed and difficult to follow, showing a partial and poorly organised attempt to report the visual data. The writing lacks meaningful comparison between the charts, which is essential for this task. To move to a higher band, the writer must ensure all key features are accurately presented, supported by a clear, cohesive overview that highlights the most important trends and comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text lacks a clear logical progression and overall organization. While it is broken into paragraphs, the internal structure of these paragraphs is extremely weak and confusing. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in a series of disconnected statements rather than a flowing report. For instance, transitional phrases like 'According to the chat' and 'at the end seven category' fail to guide the reader smoothly through the data. Additionally, referencing is unclear, making it hard to determine which numbers correspond to which categories. To achieve a better band, the writer needs to group related information logically, use appropriate cohesive devices to link ideas, and ensure the overall structure flows naturally from an introduction to an overview and detailed body paragraphs.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple words and direct copying of terms from the prompt, such as 'library members' and 'total loans by category'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward phrasing throughout, such as 'the first age of library members in 2016 children 22%' and 'Four category young adults'. These issues reveal a limited and minimally adequate range of vocabulary for this task type. Word choice is often inaccurate, which occasionally causes strain for the reader trying to interpret the intended data. To improve in this area, the student should expand their range of vocabulary, practice using precise descriptive terms for data trends, and pay closer attention to correct word forms and collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical structures used are very limited, consisting mostly of fragmented or poorly formed sentences. The writer attempts some complex structures, but these attempts are consistently faulty and lack essential verbs and prepositions, as seen in phrases like 'some categories shows fluctuations by followed increment as well as decrement'. Frequent errors in basic sentence construction, articles, and agreement are present throughout the text, which often distorts the meaning and causes significant difficulty for the reader. To reach a higher band, the writer must demonstrate control over basic sentence patterns, ensure that every sentence contains a main verb, and reduce the frequency of grammatical errors by thoroughly proofreading their work.

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