Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The chart provide information about the little chalfont library so the pie chart shows the age distribution of library members eventually the table portray total loan by category 2016 differentiating various percentage according to the data stats. furthermore, the bar graph represents total number of loan taken from 2007 to 2016 and which shows the representation of steep stepping more above.
Overall the ratio of adult from age of 18-64 has 51% take while the total loan category has children fiction and adult fiction ranging in a ratio of 38% the total number of loan range from 2007 to 2016 has seen the inclination.
The age of library members varies accordingly, has the adult from age 18 to 64 gets 51% in comparison to the children aligning in a range of 22% and eventually the young adult ranging from 13 to 17 is having 15% while the adult at the age of 65 and over has been decline to 12%. the table for total loan by category in 2016 get children fiction and adult fiction in a range of 38% while the children's non fiction and adult nonfiction is ranging in 6% and 13% in comparison the adult non-fiction is more than the children non- fiction. while the children DVD's has 1% the adult audio book has 2% and the young adult is having 2%.
The bar graph for the total number of loan has been in between range from 2007 to 2016. initial 2007 we can see the lone rate has gone above a bit 15000 while going further 2008 and 2009 there has been an increased in the amount of loans reaching till 20000. the 2010-12 has seen steep incline in the growth of loan ranging above 20000. While in 2013 the amount of loan got decrease below 20000 but from 2014-15 saw increase in amount of loan above it. in 2016 we can see the maximum growth of loan has reached till 25000. overall a growth and increase in the amount of loan from 2007 to 2016
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response successfully addresses all parts of the prompt by covering the pie chart, table, and bar graph. Key features and main trends are identified, such as the highest age group proportion being 51% for adults aged 18 to 64 and the overall upward trend in loans from 2007 to 2016. However, some areas are under-developed or inaccurately reported. For instance, the overview incorrectly states that the 18-64 age group has a '51% take' in the loan category rather than membership, blending two separate charts together. Furthermore, some data points are described rather loosely, such as stating that loans in 2007 went 'above a bit 15000' rather than providing a more precise reading. Despite these minor lapses in clarity and precision, the response presents a relevant overview and covers the main visual data adequately.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response maintains a coherent overall arrangement and is divided into paragraphs that address the different visual elements. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. The student relies on repetitive transitional phrases like 'while' and 'furthermore' to link clauses, and referencing is occasionally unclear, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters and blending distinct sentences without proper punctuation. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow within paragraphs sometimes stalls due to run-on sentences and a lack of varied cohesive devices. To reach a higher band, the writer needs to organise information with smoother logical transitions and ensure that referencing between sentences is precise and unambiguous.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, providing a sufficient range to describe the charts and graphs. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary items and specific terms such as 'distribution', 'proportion', 'inclination', and 'steep incline'. However, there are noticeable inaccuracies in word choice and collocations, such as 'total loan category', 'loan rate has gone above a bit', and 'amount of loan got decrease'. Spelling and word-form errors also occur throughout the text, such as 'chalfont', 'non fiction', and 'DVD's'. These errors do not seriously impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score because precision and natural phrasing are lacking.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting relative clauses and comparative structures. However, grammatical control is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in verb forms, tense usage, and agreement, such as 'The chart provide', 'has been decline', and 'saw increase in amount'. Additionally, punctuation is weak, with missing capitalisation at the beginning of sentences and run-on structures that lack appropriate conjunctions or full stops. While the errors rarely completely impede understanding, they occur with enough frequency across different sentence patterns to keep the response at this level. Improving punctuation control and ensuring accurate subject-verb agreement will help elevate the grammatical score.
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