Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts data illustrate information related with the Little Chalfont Library.
Overall, adults which have age between 18-64 are the highest in library members and childrens are on the second. Furthermore, the highest loans were taken by children and adults in the fiction section.
In pie chart, the data shown that the highest members were accounted are children with 51 percentage. The second highest amount of library members accounted with number 22. Furthermore, remaining sections were figured 15 and 12.
The bar chart showed different figures related to the total number of loan taken by library members. In 2007, loans were the lowest among all years. In 2008 and 2009 loans were the same at the rate of 19000. Moreover, the loans were between 2010 and 2012 remained above 20,000 and in 2013 it slightly moved down to 20000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response responds to the task only minimally and fails to reach the required word count, falling short of the 150-word minimum at 139 words. Furthermore, the student misinterprets the data significantly in the description of the pie chart and demographic figures, confusing the category percentages and age groups (for instance, stating that children accounted for 51 percentage, whereas the chart shows that adults aged 18-64 make up 51 percent while children make up 22 percent). The overview is very basic, and the data reporting lacks accuracy and development. To improve, you must ensure that your total word count meets the minimum requirement, read the charts and axes carefully to report the exact data, and provide a clear, accurate overview of the main trends without confusing the figures.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some organisation with basic paragraphing, but the response lacks clear overall progression. Paragraph breaks are used to separate different charts, but the transitions between ideas are mechanical and weak, often relying on repetitive connectors such as 'Furthermore' and 'In pie chart'. Referencing is also sometimes unclear, which hampers the logical flow of information. To move to a higher band, you need to ensure a smoother, more logical progression of ideas throughout the text. Use a wider variety of cohesive devices naturally, and make sure that referencing words clearly point to the intended subjects to guide the reader effortlessly through your report.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, showing a limited range appropriate for this level. There are noticeable errors in word choice and form, such as 'childrens' instead of 'children', and awkward phrasing like 'adults which have age between'. These inaccuracies do not entirely impede communication, but they restrict the precision of your report. To achieve a higher score, you should build a broader vocabulary specifically suited for describing data, trends, and proportions. Practise using less common lexical items accurately, pay close attention to word forms and plurals, and ensure your collocations are natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent errors. When complex structures are attempted, they often contain grammatical flaws, such as incorrect relative clauses ('adults which have age between') and preposition errors ('loan taken by library members'). There are also frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'In pie chart, the data shown'. These frequent errors can cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic grammatical accuracy, including correct verb tenses, prepositions, articles, and plurals, while gradually incorporating accurate complex sentence patterns.
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