Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given pie chart illustrates the four different attendes of Little Chalfont library. Moreover, the table describes the total loans by category for 2016 and line graph representes total number of loans from 2007 to 2016.
Overall, 18 to 64 year old adults dominate with half proportion in 2016 followed by children near to 1/4 proportion. In 2016, children's and adult diction had been prominent with highly percentages with 38% value, while children's DVDs got a least one proportion in loans category.
Furthermore, Young adults (13-17) and adults (65 and over) members are nearly equal attendance in 2016. However, the 13 % adult non-fiction show double in ratio than children's non-fiction category with 6% value followed by Adult audio books and young adults remained same only 2% of total loan category.
The total number of loans gradually from 16, 000 in 2007 to 22,000 in 2016. Concequently, nearly 21000 loan has been equally pridicted in three various years 2010, 2012, and 2014 and show a minute hipe in 2015 near to 21500 amount of loan. From consective two years 2008 to 2009, the amount of loan fixed 19000, while slight hump show in 2013 with 19500 loan approximately.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The response successfully covers all parts of the visual data by summarising the pie chart, table, and line graph, thereby earning a strong overall score. Main features and key trends are identified, such as the dominance of the 18-64 age group and the upward trajectory of total loans from 2007 to 2016. However, it sits at this level because some aspects are slightly under-developed or contain minor inaccuracies in data interpretation. For instance, the reference to children's and adult diction (fiction) having 'highly percentages with 38% value' lacks precision, and the description of the line graph misses some finer comparative nuances between intermediate years. To reach the next band, the response would need to provide a more fully developed and rigorously accurate overview of all data sets without minor omissions or vague generalisations.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to structure the information logically into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs dedicated to the different charts. Cohesive devices are employed to connect ideas, such as 'Moreover', 'Overall', and 'Furthermore', meeting the baseline requirements for logical progression. Nevertheless, cohesion is at times mechanical or faulty, as seen in awkward transitions and referencing issues. For example, the linkage between sentences in the final paragraph regarding the loan trends can feel abrupt and difficult to follow smoothly. To achieve a higher band, the student must ensure that cohesive devices are used more naturally and that the progression of ideas from sentence to sentence is seamless rather than disjointed.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey basic data points such as percentages and categories like 'fiction' and 'non-fiction'. The student also attempts less common vocabulary items and phrases, including 'dominate with half proportion' and 'gradually'. However, the vocabulary is limited by noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally impede smooth communication. Examples of lexical slips include 'attendes' instead of attendees, 'diction' instead of fiction, 'highly percentages', 'least one proportion', 'hipe' instead of hike, and 'Concequently'. These persistent inaccuracies prevent the lexical score from moving into higher territory. Expanding lexical precision and mastering word forms will be essential for future improvement.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures such as subordinate clauses and comparative constructions. However, the grammatical range is limited, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are recurrent errors in verb forms, tenses, and missing prepositions or articles, such as 'line graph representes', 'are nearly equal attendance', 'show double in ratio', and 'The total number of loans gradually from...'. These frequent errors in grammar and punctuation cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted control over complex syntactic structures. To progress, the writer needs to increase the proportion of error-free sentences and exercise better control over basic verb agreement and tense consistency.
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