Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given bar graph illustrates the total figures of loans by Chalfont Libray over the period of ten years, from 2007 to 2016, along with a table of loan categories and a percenatage split of age of library members. Overall, the amount of lending by the library was fluctuating and the most loaned category was Children's fiction.

Firstly, the pie chart shows the proportions of ages of member. In which, adults between the age of 16 and 66 were almost half of the total chart. It was followed by the children, who were 22 percent of the total members. Additionally young adults and adults over 65 years of age, collectively made about one fourth of the chart. Additionally, the presented table illustrates the loan by categories for example, children's fiction and adult fiction were 38 percent, each. Rest of the categories of books were only 24 percent of the total loans.

The bar depicts the oscillating trend of lending by the library. It starts at the figure of a bit more than 15 thousand and touched peak in the year of 2011, when it was slightly above the mark of 20,000. In the years preceding to and following the year of 2011, the figure remained somewhat same.

Overall, there was a huge loan in fiction category.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the three visuals and give an overview, noting that lending fluctuated and that fiction was prominent. You also report several relevant figures, including children at 22% and both fiction categories at 38%. However, some key information is inaccurate or incomplete: adults aged 18–64 account for 51%, not adults aged 16–66, and the loans chart reaches its highest point in 2016, not 2011. The claim that lending stayed “somewhat same” around 2011 overlooks the later rise and fall. The category summary that the remaining books made up 24% is unclear and omits the individual shares. More accurate comparisons and a fuller overview of the membership and loan trends would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to the membership, category and annual-loan information. Paragraphing helps separate these topics, and phrases such as “Firstly” and “Additionally” signal some relationships. However, progression is not consistently clear: the overview is repeated at the end, while the final paragraph does not develop the main trend across the full period. “In which” creates an incomplete link to the preceding sentence, and repeated use of “Additionally” makes cohesion mechanical. The discussion also shifts between charts without always making the comparisons explicit. Organise the body into clearer groups and use precise links to show contrasts and changes over time.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportions,” “oscillating trend,” “peak,” and “category,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There is also an attempt to vary wording for the loan figures. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this task: “total figures of loans” and “huge loan” do not clearly describe the data, while “the most loaned category” is awkward. “The bar depicts” is imprecise when referring to the line or trend shown. Spelling errors such as “Libray” and “percenatage” are noticeable, and “Rest of the categories of books” is an imprecise description because the categories include DVDs and audio books. Use standard chart collocations and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, and most of the information can be followed. However, errors in sentence construction and grammatical control are frequent enough to make some statements awkward or unclear. “In which, adults…” is a fragment, and “adults between the age of 16 and 66 were almost half” has an incorrect age range and an unclear comparison structure. In “It starts … and touched peak,” the verb forms do not match, and “In the years preceding to and following the year” has an incorrect preposition and an unnecessarily complex pattern. Articles and number forms also need attention, as in “a bit more than 15 thousand.” Build accuracy in basic clauses first, then use complex structures only when their relationships are clear.

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