Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The illustrated bar chat, pie chart and the table accumulately provides the information regarding a public library named Little Chalfont, in a town.

Overall, the age group of 18-64 out numbers the rest of age groups in regard to the library members, childrens fiction books were most demanded in terms of loans in 2016, making it 38% as compared to the rest, whereas, total number of loans peaked in 2016.

Predominently, the demand in number of loans show a dramatic flucuation starting from 2007 and ending in 2016. The number of borrows in 2007 were 16000, which became consistent in 2008 and 2009 making them 19000, which boomed slightly and reached 21000 in 2011, However, it showed a dramatic downfall and slashed to 19500 in 2013 and started to rise making it 22000 in 2016.

The age group of library members which was most active in 2016 was 18-64, however, young adults were the least active members. The Children;s fiction was most borrowed ategory in 2016, whereas, Childres's DVD were least demanded category.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main features: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, children’s fiction is a leading loan category, and total loans reach their highest point in 2016. You also describe the broad rise and fall in annual loans. However, some comparisons are incomplete or inaccurate: young adults are not the least represented membership group (those aged 65 and over are), and children’s DVDs are the smallest loan category, but this is not clearly distinguished from membership. The trend description also omits the slight decline after 2011 and the recovery after 2013 in sufficient detail. Include the key membership percentages and compare the two largest loan categories, both at 38%, to make the report more fully informative.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about loans and then membership and categories. This gives the reader a coherent overall arrangement. However, the final paragraph returns to information already mentioned, and the chart details are not grouped as clearly as they could be. Some linking is mechanical or awkward, particularly the repeated use of “whereas” and “however”; the long loan-trend sentence also joins several stages without clear punctuation. Organise the body into one paragraph on membership and loan categories and another on the time trend, using clear comparisons and references. This would strengthen progression and make the relationships between figures easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of task-related vocabulary, including “peaked,” “consistent,” “demand,” and “dramatic downfall,” and the main meaning is generally understandable. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing charts: “bar chat” should be “bar chart,” “accumulately provides” is not an appropriate collocation, and “number of borrows” is better expressed as “number of loans.” “Out numbers” and “boomed” are also informal or incorrectly formed in this context. Spelling errors such as “Predominently,” “flucuation,” and “Childres's” reduce precision. Use standard reporting language such as “accounted for,” “remained stable,” and “increased,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses linked with “whereas” and “which,” and the overall message can usually be followed. Some grammatical errors remain, however. In “the age group of 18-64 out numbers the rest of age groups,” the comparison needs a clearer noun phrase and article use; “the number of borrows … were” also has subject–verb disagreement. The sentence beginning “The number of borrows in 2007…” runs through several changes without adequate sentence boundaries, and capitalisation after “However” is inconsistent. There are also punctuation and apostrophe problems in the final paragraph. Build shorter, controlled sentences around each trend and check agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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