Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
This is the little Chalfont library. Age of library members 2016.
Total loan by category in 2016 is 30% Childern's fiction, 6% Children's non-fiction, 1% Children DVDs, Young adults 2%, 30% Adult Fiction, 13% Adult non-Fiction, 2% Adult audio books. There is also circule which show some number 51 which coverd half of the circule, 12 faded, 22 colored with black and 15 has many lines.
Below chart defined total number of loan form 2007 - 2016. This chart define loan by catogry by years and amount. In 2007 the total numbers of loan is given between 15,000 to 20,000, In 2008 the total numbers of loan is given between 15,000 to 20000 same in 2009 and little bit increase in 2010 which is 21,000 then in 2011 was same as 2010 and 2012 was also same before and decreased in 2013 which was below 20,000 and In 2014 the total numbers of loan is given 21000 then in 2015 was also same then last in 2016 also between 21,000 to 25,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response identifies the three visual elements and includes several relevant figures, such as the 51% share of adults aged 18–64 and the rise in loans towards 2016. However, key information is misreported: both fiction categories are given as 30% rather than 38%, and the loan figures for several years are inaccurate or too vague. For example, 2008 and 2009 were about 19,000, while 2010 was about 20,600—not 21,000; 2015 was about 21,200, not simply the same as 2014. There is no clear overview of the main patterns, and the description of the pie chart’s colours and lines does not communicate meaningful data. Select the dominant features and report them accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response follows the order of the visuals, moving from membership and loan categories to the time-series chart, so the reader can identify the general subject of each section. However, the information is not organised into clear paragraphs, and there is little overall progression from an overview to supporting details. The repeated wording “the total numbers of loan is given” makes the final section difficult to follow, while connectors such as “then,” “same,” and “also” do not clearly show the relationships between years. Group the data into meaningful comparisons—for example, the initial rise, the mid-period decline, and the later recovery—and use clearer referencing to avoid repetition.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The response uses basic vocabulary relevant to charts, including “total,” “category,” “decreased,” and “increase,” and it attempts to describe proportions and trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the account unclear, such as “circule,” “faded,” “defined,” and “loan form.” Phrases like “some number 51” and “colored with black” do not accurately express the chart information. Use standard chart language such as “accounted for,” “stood at,” “rose,” and “fell,” and name the categories directly rather than describing visual styling. Check spelling and use precise terms consistently, particularly “loans,” “children’s fiction,” and “adults aged 18–64.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts to connect several events in longer sentences, especially when describing the yearly loan totals, but sentence structures are mostly simple or joined by repeated “and” and “then.” Frequent errors in sentence formation and verb patterns make some statements hard to interpret. For example, “In 2007 the total numbers of loan is given” has an incorrect tense and number pattern, while “in 2011 was same as 2010” lacks a clear subject and article. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, with long run-on sequences in the final paragraph. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, use past tense consistently for the 2007–2016 data, and separate comparisons with full stops.
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