Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

There is a chart of Little Chalfont library in town. In the chart there is a detailed informtaion of all the members of the library and thwere loans.

Firstly the age of the members is discussed. Basically this is data of 2016. These members includes 22% Childrenof age below 15, 51% adults of age 18 to 64%, 15% Young adults of age 13 to 17, 12% adults of age 65 and more than 65.

Their loans are also discussed in the table. Loans are collected from different categories. From children 38% loan is collected, from children's non fiction 6%, from Children's DVDs 1% is collected, from young adults 2% is collected, 28% is collected from adult fiction, 13% is collected from adult non-fiction a

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the two 2016 topics and report several figures accurately, including the 51% share of members aged 18–64 and the 38%, 6%, and 1% loan shares for children’s categories. However, the response is incomplete: it stops partway through the adult-loans information, omits adult audio books, and does not describe the line graph showing loans rising overall from about 15,700 to 21,700, with fluctuations. There is also a key factual error: adult fiction accounts for 38%, not 28%. No overview summarises the main patterns across the visuals. The response is 124 words, below the required 150, which further limits coverage. To improve, include a concise overview and select the main comparisons from all three visuals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the library, discusses member ages, and then moves to loan categories. Signposting such as “Firstly” and “Their loans are also discussed” helps the reader recognise these shifts. However, the organisation remains limited because the information is presented as one continuous block, with no clear overview or separate treatment of the line graph. The final sentence is cut off, so the discussion does not reach a complete ending. Some links are also vague, particularly “Their loans,” where the reference is not fully clear. Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and key details, and connect each chart to the next with precise transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant basic terms such as “members,” “loans,” “categories,” and “non-fiction,” so the subject is generally understandable. However, the vocabulary is repetitive and some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, including “a detailed information,” “loans are collected,” and “data of 2016.” There are also spelling and spacing errors, such as “informtaion” and “Childrenof,” which reduce accuracy. The phrase “from children 38% loan is collected” does not clearly identify the category as children’s fiction. Aim for concise chart language and accurate category names, for example, “accounted for,” “represented,” and “the proportion of loans.” Proofread spelling and use consistent forms for labels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most of the response uses short, simple statements, and the reader can follow the general topic. There is an attempt to use a longer sentence when listing age groups, but control is uneven: “These members includes” has subject–verb disagreement, and “adults of age 18 to 64%” places the percentage awkwardly within the age range. The opening, “There is a chart … in town,” is also structurally unclear, while the final sentence ends without a completed clause. Sentence patterns are repetitive, with little use of accurate comparisons or complex structures. Practise complete sentences that compare proportions, and check agreement, articles, and punctuation before submitting.

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