Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts provides information about public library in a town known as Little chalfont.The pie chart illustrates the age categories of library members with respective ratio.The table and bar graph delineate about library loans by categories and fluctuation in number of loans in the past 9 years.

overall, the pie chart explains that more than half of library members are adults.The highest loan belongs to the categories like children's fiction and adult fiction while the children DVD makes the lowest proportion.

The pie chart shows that the adults makes over half of total members and others like

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the main subject and include a relevant overview: adults form the largest membership group, and children’s and adult fiction are the leading loan categories, while children’s DVDs are the smallest. However, the response reports almost none of the chart’s supporting details: for example, adults aged 18–64 account for 51% of members, and loans rose overall from about 15,700 in 2007 to 21,700 in 2016, with fluctuations. The final sentence is unfinished, and the response does not adequately summarise all three visuals. It is also 53 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to select and explain key comparisons. Develop the overview and support it with accurate figures and trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introduction is followed by an overview and then a further detail paragraph. The overview also groups related information from the charts. However, the progression stops abruptly: the final paragraph ends with “and others like” and does not complete its point. As a result, the reader cannot follow a full account of the information or see how the three visuals relate. Linking is limited, and the introduction’s list of chart types is not followed by a clear, systematic description of each one. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and the main comparisons, and connect them with clear references such as “By contrast” or “Over the period”.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some suitable task vocabulary, including “age categories,” “proportion,” “loan,” and “fluctuation,” and the reader can generally identify the topic. There is also an attempt to vary reporting verbs with “illustrates” and “delineate.” However, several choices are awkward or imprecise: “respective ratio” is not a natural way to describe the membership shares, and “the highest loan belongs to the categories” is unclear. “Children DVD” is also an inaccurate form for the category label. The range is not broad enough to describe the trends and comparisons in detail, partly because the response is very short. Prefer precise chart language such as “share,” “accounted for,” “loan total,” and “the smallest proportion,” and use the category names accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms, including “The pie chart illustrates…” and the clause beginning “while the children DVD makes…”. However, errors in agreement and sentence construction are frequent enough to make parts awkward. For example, “The charts provides” should use a plural verb, while “the adults makes” has the same agreement problem. The opening also runs two sentences together after “Little chalfont,” and the final sentence is incomplete, so its grammatical structure cannot be followed to a conclusion. Most sentences rely on a basic reporting pattern, with little variety in clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, sentence boundaries, and completion of each sentence; then practise combining accurate comparisons into longer structures.

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