Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the charts illustrates about the proportion of loans taken by different age group individulas from little chalfont library in between 2007 to 2016.

Overall, a noticeable numbers of adults intrested in adult fiction from library while the childrens also showed significant intrest in children fiction however young adults accounts for the lowest contribuation in loans.

Library loans saw noticeable increase over the period starting from 2007 there is slightly over 15,000 loans although later on it fluctuated around 20,000 or marginally above but In 2016 a steadily increase in library loans which is close above 22,000 level. whereas mostly adults around 18 to 64 age group are accounted for this increase because they contain 51% of the share mostly they get adult fiction and adult non fiction which represted at 38% and 13% respectively.

Childrens are accounted for the largest share in children fiction around 38% which is more than thriple of children's non fiction at 6%. while the lowest category where children applied for loan is children's dvds at 1% which is marginally below the overall participation of young adults age group of 13 to 17 at just 2% same for the adults over 65 age they get 2% share in adult audio books.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main elements of the charts and identify useful comparisons, including the adult age group’s 51% share, the equal 38% shares for adult and children’s fiction, and the small proportions for children’s DVDs and young-adult loans. Your overview also notes that loans rose overall. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the 2016 figure is described as “close above 22,000,” whereas the chart shows about 21,700, and the claim that loans increased steadily in 2016 does not reflect the year-by-year pattern. The opening also describes the charts as proportions of loans by age group, although they show membership ages, loan categories, and total loans over time. Make the overview more precise and report the trend without implying a steady rise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs covering the loan trend and category shares. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. Some connections between ideas are less clear, however. For example, “whereas mostly adults around 18 to 64 age group are accounted for this increase” links the membership proportion to the rise in total loans without evidence that one caused the other. The final paragraph also moves quickly from children’s fiction to young-adult loans and then to older adults’ audio books. Use clearer topic sentences and group comparisons by chart or by age/category. Check punctuation around linking words such as “whereas” and “while” so the relationships between points are easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “fluctuated,” “share,” and “category,” and these help communicate comparisons. There is also an attempt to vary wording rather than repeat “loans” throughout. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, such as “individulas,” “intrested,” “contribuation,” and “represted.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise: “a noticeable numbers,” “the lowest category where children applied for loan,” and “close above 22,000 level.” Choose standard collocations such as “accounted for,” “made up,” and “the figure stood at,” and proofread spelling carefully. More accurate vocabulary would make the comparisons sound clearer and more appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses with “although,” “because,” and “while,” and the main message is generally understandable. However, errors in sentence structure and grammatical control occur across the response. For example, “the charts illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “Library loans saw noticeable increase” is missing an article. The sentence beginning “whereas mostly adults…” is not grammatically well formed, and the long final paragraph contains several clauses joined without clear punctuation. There are also inconsistent sentence boundaries and capitalisation, such as “but In 2016.” Aim for shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses where the relationship is clear. Check agreement, articles, and punctuation during revision.

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