Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the age of library members in 2016 is childrens 22 young adults 13 to 17 is 15 and a adult above 65 is 12 and adults is 18 to 64 is 18

in 2007 the total number of loans 5000 to 15000 and in 2008 its 5000 to 18000 and 2009 also 18000 in [redacted phone]0 in [redacted phone]0 in [redacted phone]0 and in [redacted phone]0 and in [redacted phone]0 and in [redacted phone]0 and in 2016 its 23000

in 2011 and 2016 its percentage is 38 children and adult same and young adult and adult audio books it also same 2 percent and children 6 percnet and children DVDs 1 percent and adult fiction 13 percent and non fiction its 13 percent

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You include information from all three visuals, but the response does not yet summarise the main features clearly. Some figures are inaccurate: adults aged 18–64 are 51%, not 18%, and the loan totals are generally overstated (for example, about 15,700 in 2007 and 21,700 in 2016). The category figures are also confused: 38% applies to both children’s fiction and adult fiction, while adult non-fiction is 13%, not adult fiction. There is no clear overview of the main patterns, such as adults forming the largest membership group or loans rising overall despite fluctuations. The response is also 27 words below the required minimum. Select the key comparisons, check each figure, and add a concise overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The information is presented in a broadly recognisable order: membership figures, yearly loans, and then loan categories. This gives the reader some sense of how the response relates to the visuals. However, it is written as three unstructured lines rather than organised paragraphs, and the long sequence of years joined by “and” makes the loan trend difficult to follow. The final section is especially unclear because it begins “in 2011 and 2016” even though it describes category percentages. Use an introduction and overview, then group related details into paragraphs. Clear sentence boundaries and linking phrases such as “overall,” “by contrast,” and “in comparison” would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the charts, including “age,” “members,” “total number of loans,” and “percentage,” so the general subject is usually identifiable. However, the range is limited and some wording is imprecise or repetitive, particularly the repeated “and” in the list of annual totals. Phrases such as “its percentage is 38 children and adult same” do not clearly express the relationship between the categories and their shares. Spelling errors, including “childrens” and “percnet,” also reduce accuracy. Practise standard chart language for proportions and trends, such as “accounted for,” “remained stable,” and “increased,” and use the full category names to avoid ambiguity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response relies almost entirely on simple statements and lists, so it shows little variety in sentence structure. Several clauses lack a clear grammatical frame, as in “young adults 13 to 17 is 15,” while “a adult above 65 is 12” has problems with article use and sentence construction. Tense and agreement are also inconsistent, for example “in 2008 its” and “in 2016 its percentage.” Punctuation and capitalisation are largely absent, making boundaries between ideas unclear. Build complete sentences with a subject and verb, and practise comparative structures such as “The adult group was the largest, at 51%.” Accurate full stops and commas will also help readers interpret the figures.

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