Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the number of members of four age-group members in the little chalfont library with the table provides the percentage of loans by different categoties in 2016 , while the bar chart shows the total number of loans by the public library beteen 2007 and 2016.

Overall, it is clear that the proportion of aduts aged ( 18-64) was higher among all age-group of individuals. Fiction experienced the most popular category among both adults and child. while children DVDs had the lowest shares among all loans categories. Although, the figure of loans were increased slightly throughout the given period.

Regarding age-group, people aged (18-64) accounted for more than half of shares approximately 51 members. There was only 12 members aged above 65 and over in the chalfornt library By contrast , there were 22 seats for children Although, younger adults aged 13-17 had 15 members. Conversely, bothe children and adults brought 38% for frictions , whereas only 1% stood at leans by children DVDs.

Although, in 2007, the number of loans was about 15000. Over the following years this figure rose modestly , reaching around 20,000 in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main features: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, fiction accounts for the biggest loan shares, children’s DVDs are the smallest category, and loans rise overall. The figures for membership and loan categories are mostly reported accurately. However, the overview says loans increased “throughout” the period, although the chart shows several declines, including after 2011 and in 2013. The final paragraph also gives an inaccurate endpoint: loans reached about 21,700 in 2016, not around 20,000. The trend is underdeveloped because it omits the peak and fluctuations. Also, “51 members” should be presented as 51% of members, since the chart gives proportions. More precise reporting of the trend and units would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs covering the membership and loan data. This helps the reader identify the main topics. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and the final paragraph is too brief to explain the loan trend clearly. Several linking words are used inaccurately or repetitively, especially “Although” at the start of sentences where no contrast follows. “Conversely” also does not clearly connect the figures that follow it. Some references, such as “this figure,” are understandable but could be more precise. Grouping the membership and category comparisons separately, then describing the loan trend with its rises, falls, and endpoint, would create a clearer progression and more effective cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “proportion,” “category,” and “shares,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, a number of word-choice and spelling errors reduce precision: “seats” is not appropriate for library members, “frictions” appears to mean “fiction,” and “leans” appears to mean “loans.” There are also misspellings such as “categoties,” “beteen,” and “chalfornt.” Some phrases are awkward or imprecise, including “the number of members of four age-group members” and “Fiction experienced the most popular category.” Use standard chart collocations such as “the proportion of members,” “fiction was the most popular loan category,” and “the number of loans.” Careful proofreading would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including a complex introduction with “while” and an overview beginning “Although.” Some sentences communicate the intended comparisons, but grammatical errors are frequent enough to make parts awkward or unclear. For example, “the number of members of four age-group members” has a faulty noun structure, and “Fiction experienced the most popular category” lacks a correct grammatical construction. The sentence beginning “Although, in 2007” is incomplete in its use of a concessive linker, while “There was only 12 members” has subject–verb disagreement. Punctuation and spacing around commas and brackets are also inconsistent. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then add complex clauses with correctly used linkers.

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