Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts provide information of a public library in a town know as Little Chalfont. The pie chart represents proportion of different age groups of library members in 2016, while the table shows the total loans by category in 2016. The bar chart illustrates the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016.

Overall, adults who age between 18 to 64 contributes more to the library compare to other age groups. Children's fiction and adult fiction are at the top among other categories of loan, while there is slight fluctuation in total number of loans.

Adults who age between 18 to 64 contributed upto 51% percent in the library, while children occupied 22%. Young adults who age between 13 to 17 represented 15% and adults who are 65 and above that, occupied only 12%. Children's DVD ranked last in the total loan by category, contributing 1% only. While young adults and adult audio books each contributed for 2% of the total loan. Adult non-fiction represented 13% loan and children's non-fiction are responsible for 6% loan. Children's fiction and adult fiction each accounted for 38% of the loan.

In 2007, the total number of loans were only 16,000 which rose to 21,000 in 2010. In 2011, the number loans slightly increased to 22,000 and in 2013 the number of loans dropped to 19,500, approximately. In 2015, the loans reached rougly 23,000 and in the final year the number peaked at approximately 23,500.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three visuals and provide a relevant overview: adults aged 18–64 are the largest membership group, fiction leads the loan categories, and total loans fluctuate. Most category figures are reported accurately. However, the membership figures are percentages, not contributions “to the library,” and the loan trend contains several overestimates: the total was about 21,200 in 2015 and 21,700 in 2016, rather than roughly 23,000 and 23,500. The 2011 figure was about 21,000, not 22,000. The overview could also describe the overall rise from 2007 to 2016, despite fluctuations. These inaccuracies and uneven development limit the precision of an otherwise relevant summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear four-paragraph structure: introduction, overview, category details, and the loan trend. This gives the reader a coherent route through the visuals, and phrases such as “while” and “In 2007” help signal comparisons and chronology. However, the overview’s “slight fluctuation” is not fully connected to the overall upward movement, and the final paragraph selects years without consistently showing the trend across the period. Some linking is also mechanical, particularly the repeated “while” constructions. Grouping the category figures into children’s and adults’ loans, then contrasting these with the smaller categories, would make the comparisons more purposeful and improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “represented,” “accounted for,” “contributed,” “ranked last,” and “fluctuation,” so the main information is generally understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “information of a public library,” “contributes more to the library,” and “occupied 22%” do not express the data precisely. “Upto” and “rougly” also contain spelling or form errors, while “total loan” is repeated where “total loans” or “share of loans” would be more natural. Aim for precise reporting verbs and collocations, such as “made up,” “accounted for,” and “the number of loans rose.” This would make the vocabulary more controlled and reduce awkward phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses joined with “while,” and most of the message remains clear. Some grammatical errors recur, however. In “adults who age between 18 to 64 contributes,” the relative clause, preposition pattern, and subject–verb agreement are faulty; “adults aged 18 to 64 accounted for” would be more accurate. “Children’s non-fiction are responsible” also has a singular/plural agreement problem, and “the number loans” is missing “of.” There are tense and sentence-structure issues in “In 2007, the total number of loans were only 16,000 which rose…” Use “was” and separate or punctuate the following clause. More consistently accurate agreement and clause construction would strengthen the response.

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