Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the age of library members in 2016 ranging from 13 to over 65 years old. Secondary, the table describes total loans by 7 different categories, lastly, the bar chart depicts the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016.

As it can be noticed, in the pie chart the total number of adults ranging from 18-64 was 51, whereas, adults over the age of 65 were only 12 which was moderately lower than adults below 64 years old. Children who were library members were 22 was which slightly more than young adults ranging from 13-17 who only made up about 15 in total.

Secondly, total loans of children's fiction was 38% which was quite similar to adult fiction. Surprisingly, these two were the only categories which went above 35% Whereas, the rest of the categories remained under 14%. Indiciating interest in fictions.

Lastly, the total number of loans in 2007 was around 15,000 which increased slightly to around 20,000 or more till 2011. Surprisingly, it went down slightly below 20,000 till 2013 but interestingly, went up slightly to above 20,000 till 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three visuals and report several relevant figures accurately, including the 51% share of members aged 18–64, the matching 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction, and the overall rise in loans from 2007 to 2016. The account of the loan trend also notes the dip around 2012–13 and subsequent recovery. However, the response lacks a clear overall summary of the main patterns, and some comparisons are imprecise: for example, the 12% aged 65 and over is described as “moderately lower” without clarifying the contrast with other groups. The category discussion could identify the smallest shares more specifically, while the trend description would be stronger with key turning points and approximate values. Develop these features into a concise overview and support it with selected data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is arranged in a sensible sequence: membership, loan categories, then the decade-long trend. Paragraphing helps distinguish the three visuals, and signposts such as “Secondly” and “Lastly” make the progression easy to follow. However, these transitions are somewhat mechanical, and the opening lists the chart types rather than establishing the main comparisons. Some links between ideas are unclear, particularly “Children who were library members were 22 was which slightly more,” and the fragment beginning “Indiciating interest in fictions.” Group related comparisons into complete sentences and use linking language to show contrast or similarity, rather than relying mainly on ordinal markers. A brief overview before the detail would also give the report a clearer overall progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing charts, including “increased,” “went down,” “categories,” and “made up.” Terms such as “total loans” and “adult fiction” are relevant and generally clear. There are, however, several awkward or inaccurate choices that reduce precision: “Secondary” and “lastly” are not natural ways to introduce the visuals, “moderately lower” is an imprecise comparison, and “interest in fictions” is an unsupported and unnatural phrase. “Surprisingly” and “interestingly” are repeated without adding meaningful evaluation. Aim for neutral reporting language and precise terms such as “accounted for,” “declined,” and “recovered.” Check spelling as well: “Indiciating” should be “indicating.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of the intended meaning can be understood. Some grammatical errors remain, especially in sentence construction and punctuation. For example, “Children who were library members were 22 was which slightly more” contains an unnecessary repeated verb and an incomplete comparison; “Indiciating interest in fictions” is a sentence fragment; and the clause beginning “Whereas” is not properly joined to the preceding sentence. The opening sentence also uses “ranging from 13 to over 65 years old” in a way that does not accurately frame the age groups. Build comparisons with complete structures, such as “The 22% share of children was slightly higher than the 15% share of young adults,” and check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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