Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts illustrate the information about a local library of town prononuced as Little Chalfont from 2007 to 2016.

Overview, the adults in library members were over half of total and the significant category of adults( age of 65 and over) were very low. However, the total number of loans were increased slightly over the period.

First of all, the majority of Little Chalfont Library member were adult 18-64 which was over half of the total and the children were just 22%. However, the young adults were lower than children which were under 20%. The least category of loan in 2016 was Children's DVDs (1%) and the adult and children's fiction were same which was just 38%, other categories showed some fluctuation in first half quarter.

Socond of all, the total number of loans were started in 2007 with over 15000 and continue the upword trend and reached at just over 20000 in 2011. After that the loans showed a slight decline and hit the point under 20000 and then again recovered the number loans and went to over 21000 in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important features: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, the 65-and-over group is small, fiction accounts for the largest loan shares, and total loans rise overall. The figures for children (22%), young adults (under 20%) and the two fiction categories (38% each) are broadly accurate. However, the overview is brief and the report does not clearly summarise the full pattern in the category table. The claim that categories “showed some fluctuation” is not supported by the table, which gives fixed percentages, and the loan trend is described imprecisely: it rises to about 21,000 in 2011, falls below 20,000 in 2013, then recovers to about 21,700 by 2016. Select and compare the main features more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure, with an opening, an overview and two body sections. It also attempts to guide the reader with “First of all” and “After that.” However, progression is not consistently clear: the first body paragraph moves from membership figures to loan categories and then makes a vague comment about fluctuation, while the second covers the timeline. “Socond of all” is an inaccurate transition, and “Overview,” used as a sentence opener, does not connect smoothly to the preceding introduction. Group related information into clearer paragraphs—for example, membership and loan-category shares separately from the decade-long trend—and use transitions that show the relationship between stages without relying on formulaic sequencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “majority,” “category,” “slight decline” and “recovered,” so the reader can generally understand the comparisons and trend. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “the significant category,” “hit the point,” and “recovered the number loans.” “Other categories showed some fluctuation” is also imprecise for percentages presented as fixed shares. Spelling errors such as “prononuced,” “Socond” and “upword” are noticeable. Aim for precise reporting language and check spelling; phrases such as “accounted for,” “fell to” and “rose again” would describe the data more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences, including a contrast with “However” and a sequence using “After that.” Nevertheless, errors occur frequently and sometimes make relationships difficult to follow. For example, “the total number of loans were increased” has incorrect agreement and verb form; “the majority … member were adult” has problems with number and sentence structure; and “reached at just over 20000” uses an incorrect preposition. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “the number loans.” Practise forming accurate comparisons and trend sentences, paying particular attention to subject–verb agreement, past-tense verbs, articles and plural nouns. More reliable control of these basics would make your meaning clearer.

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