Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table and pie chart illustrates comparison of different age groups in the library called Little Chalfont that took loan in 2016.

Overall, adult aged 18-64 has largest members share, fictions books dominated loan types in 2016 and borrowing trend from 2007 to 2016.

In 2016, adults aged 18-64 fromed 51% of members, which is followed by kids and audlt communities 65 and over represented 22% and 15%, respectively. Although, young adults 13-17 made up only 12% of the total. For loans, children and adults fiction each formed 38%, followed by Adults non fiction at 13% and childreen non fictions at 6%, While other categories included only 2% of total.

The table shoed that total numbers of lons increased in 2007 roughly 15,500 to 19000 in 2008. Further more, it rosed in 2011 upto 20000, while remain constant in 2009 and rapidly increased in 2009. Although, after 2011, it gradualy go upwaed and achieved the highest target approximetly 21500 from 2012 to 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the three visuals and identify relevant main features: adults aged 18–64 are the largest membership group, fiction accounts for the biggest loan share, and total borrowing rises overall. The category figures are mostly reported accurately, but the age-group figures are misassigned: the chart shows children at 22%, young adults at 15%, adults aged 18–64 at 51%, and those aged 65+ at 12%. Your account of the line graph is also unclear and partly inaccurate: loans were about 19,000 in both 2008 and 2009, then reached around 21,000 in 2011; they did not remain constant in 2009 after rising in 2011. The overview is relevant, but the trend needs a clearer, more accurate summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the membership and loan information. This gives the reader a coherent overall arrangement. However, progression within the final paragraph is weakened by contradictory sequencing: you say loans rose to 20,000 in 2011, then remained constant in 2009 and increased in 2009. The connectors “Although” and “Further more” do not clearly express the relationships between the figures, and “While” is awkwardly attached to the preceding clause. Group the graph’s key stages in chronological order and use linking words only where they clarify a genuine contrast or continuation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “members share,” “formed,” “dominated,” and “total loans,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “fromed,” “lons,” “shoed,” and “approximetly.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “highest target” for the peak loan total and “fictions books” for fiction loans. Repetition of “increased” and “represented” limits flexibility. Aim for accurate chart language and check spelling carefully; terms such as “accounted for,” “peaked at,” and “loan categories” would make the description more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “which is followed by” and contrast clauses beginning with “Although.” However, some errors in agreement, tense, articles, and sentence construction reduce accuracy. For example, “The table and pie chart illustrates” needs plural agreement, while “adult aged 18-64 has” does not match the plural group being described. The sentence beginning “Although, after 2011” is not grammatically complete, and “it gradualy go upwaed” has an incorrect verb form. Use past tense consistently for the 2016 data and the historical trend, and check that each contrast clause is attached to a complete main clause.

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