Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of user of the little chalfont library, while the bar graph shows the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016.

Overall, in the pie chart, the adults accounted for the highest share, where older age people were held the smallest figure. For bar graph, the figures were grew gradually over the period of time.

In 2016, adults with age between 18 to 64 covered more then half of the pie chart, which is 51%, followed by children and yound adults, at 22% and 15% respectively. Adults over the age of 64 were at the least position, with 12%. Furthermore, in the bar graph, the number of loans rose marginally over the time.

In the table, Loans were classified in seved distinct category in 2016, where adult fiction and children's fiction held the same first place, with 38%. similarly, adults and children's non-fiction were 13% and 6% subsequently. Moreover, both audult audio books and young adults held same 2% and children's DVDs stood at 1% by 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three visuals and report several key figures accurately, including the 51% share for adults aged 18–64, the equal 38% shares for adult and children’s fiction, and the 1% for children’s DVDs. Your overview also identifies adults as the largest membership group and older adults as the smallest. However, the overview of loans is too general: saying they “grew gradually” misses the fluctuations, including the rise to about 20,600 in 2010, a dip after 2011, and a subsequent increase to the 2016 peak. The trend description also repeats this generalisation rather than selecting and comparing the main changes. A more precise overview of the loan pattern would make coverage of the visuals more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs giving details from the charts and table. This makes the information easy to locate, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “Moreover” help signal additions. However, the progression is not always smooth. The final paragraph begins “In the table” after the preceding paragraph has already discussed the bar graph, so the shift between visuals could be signposted more clearly. Some linking is mechanical, and “similarly” does not accurately introduce the comparison between the two non-fiction categories. Grouping related figures and using clearer references to each visual would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “share,” and “classified,” and the reader can understand the main comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the smallest figure,” “held the smallest figure,” “at the least position,” and “rose marginally.” “Marginally” also understates the overall increase in loans. Spelling errors such as “yound,” “seved,” and “audult” reduce accuracy, while repeated use of “held” limits flexibility. Aim for precise chart language and check spelling carefully; for example, describe a group as having the smallest share and say that loans fluctuated before reaching a peak.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex forms, including a relative clause in “where older age people were held the smallest figure” and participial phrasing such as “followed by children.” Most of the intended meaning remains understandable, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. For example, “the figures were grew” combines incompatible verb forms; use “the figures grew” or “the figures were growing.” In “adults with age between 18 to 64,” the age phrase needs a more accurate grammatical construction, such as “adults aged 18 to 64.” There are also issues with articles, agreement, and sentence punctuation, including the lowercase “similarly” after a full stop. Review verb forms and sentence boundaries to make your varied structures more controlled.

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