Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart shows the statistics about the little chalfont library that different age group of people toke loans by their relative several interest along with the time interval in years.

Overall, higest number of age group was adult 18-64 which has 51 percentage and then number of children was second highest in statistics which has exactly 22 percentage. Furthermore, there are some young adults 13-17 group which has almost 17 percentage and lastly the group of adults of 65 or over them has slightly bit smaller percentage of 15 to the young adults group.

The total loans by category 2016 chart shows the seven different intertest categories in percentage that how numbers were rose in 2016. Both the children fiction and adult fiction has same percentage of 38. While, the adult non fiction age group has 13 percent and children non fiction has 6 percent. second last minimum percentage is 2 that are adult audiobooks and young adults. Mean while the last and the minimum age group of interst

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies some relevant features, including the largest membership group (adults aged 18–64) and the equal 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction. However, it reports several figures inaccurately: children are 22%, but young adults are 15%, not “almost 17%”; adults aged 65 and over are 12%, not 15%. The overview also omits the loans trend chart, a major part of the task: loans generally rose from about 15,700 in 2007 to 21,700 in 2016, despite fluctuations. The category description is left unfinished, so the 1% share for children’s DVDs is not reported. To improve, summarise all three visuals, select the main comparisons, and check each figure against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: the response begins with an introduction, then discusses membership figures and loan categories in separate paragraphs. Basic linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “While” help signal relationships. However, the progression is incomplete and uneven because the loans-over-time chart is not discussed, and the final paragraph ends mid-idea (“the last and the minimum age group of interst”). Some transitions are awkward or repetitive, including “second last” and “Mean while,” and the reader is not guided clearly from one visual to the next. Use a clear sequence—overview, membership, category shares, then the trend—and finish each paragraph with a complete point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “categories,” “fiction,” and “non fiction,” so the basic subject is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural choices make parts difficult to interpret. For example, “toke loans by their relative several interest” does not clearly describe what the charts show, while “numbers were rose” and “minimum age group of interst” are unsuitable expressions. Spelling and word-form errors such as “higest,” “intertest,” and “Mean while” also reduce precision. Build a reliable set of chart-description phrases, such as “accounted for,” “share of total loans,” and “fluctuated,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and some comparisons, for example, “Both the children fiction and adult fiction has same percentage of 38.” However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. In that example, the plural subject requires “have,” and the sentence needs an article or clearer phrasing (“Both children’s fiction and adult fiction accounted for 38%”). The opening sentence lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “there are some young adults … group which has” shows problems with agreement and sentence construction. The final sentence is incomplete, and punctuation around “While” and sentence openings is inconsistent. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking agreement, articles, and complete sentence boundaries.

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