Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The following information repersents about the information the age of members and total loans by category over all period of time of public library Called Little chalfont.

It is crystal clear that the highest numbers of flow in library is adult age between 18 to 64 and the mimumm is adults 65 and over. The higest loans recorded in childern's fiction and the lowest is in adult audio book and it is grew over time.

In 2016 the little chalfont library recorded that which category of age group flow is mixmumm, it was adults 18-64 rounded 51 people and the mimumm recorded in adults 65 and over.

In graid the higest percentage of loans recorded in childern's fiction about 38% and the lowest one in childern's DVDs about 1% recorded in 2016. In bar-digram the higest total numbers of loans recorded in 2016 around mid of 25,000 and the lowest total recorded in 2007.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant headline features: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, adults aged 65 and over the smallest, and children’s fiction accounts for a large share of loans. However, the report only partly covers the charts. It misidentifies the lowest loan category: children’s DVDs are lowest at 1%, not adult audio books. It also says loans “grew over time,” although the line fluctuates, and gives no account of the overall pattern between 2007 and 2016. The 2016 total is described as around the middle of 25,000, which is inaccurate; it is approximately 21,700. To develop the response, give a clear overview of the main trends and compare the key figures accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, moving from a general statement to details about membership, loan categories and the bar chart. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the opening sentence is unclear and the chart references (“In graid” and “In bar-digram”) do not create clear links between ideas. Several points are repeated, such as the largest and smallest age groups, while the line chart’s trend is not explained. Use a clear overview paragraph followed by one paragraph for the membership and loan-category charts and another for the time series. More precise referencing and simple transitions would help readers understand how each detail relates to the task.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “total numbers of loans,” “age group” and “recorded,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning awkward, such as “numbers of flow in library,” “category of age group flow” and “it is grew over time.” Spelling errors—including “repersents,” “mimumm,” “childern’s” and “graid”—also reduce clarity. Aim for accurate, conventional chart language rather than repeatedly using “highest” and “lowest”: for example, describe a group as “accounting for” a share or a figure as “rising” or “fluctuating.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer constructions, but control is inconsistent, and faulty sentence structures sometimes make the information hard to interpret. For example, “The following information repersents about the information…” has an incomplete, repetitive structure, while “it was adults 18-64 rounded 51 people” lacks a clear grammatical relationship between the group and its figure. The phrase “it is grew over time” also combines incompatible verb forms. Articles, sentence boundaries and punctuation need more consistent control. Practise writing direct comparisons with a clear subject and verb, such as “Adults aged 18–64 made up 51% of members,” and check each sentence for a complete, correctly formed clause.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.