Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts show the proportion of age of library members and loans records from 2007 and 2016 and it also explicitly catagorised 2016 data in a table.

Overall, adults between 18-64 account for the largest share of library members, while adults 65 and over make up the smallest. There was an upward trend in the total number of loans where children's and adult's fiction's accounted for the most of it, according to 2016 ledger.

Adults aged between 18-64 represented 51% of library members, almost twice the proportions of children, at 22%. Young adults aged between 13-17 account for further 15%, while the remaining 12% are adults who are 65 or above.

The total number of loans initially stood at approximately 16 thousand in 2007. It remained unchanged at below 20 thousand in 2008 and 2009, before surpassing 20 thousand in 2010. The total number of loans fluctuated, rising in 2011 and declining in 2012 and returned back to below 20 thousand in 2013. It then increased steadily throughout the following years and ended at above 20 thousand in 2016. Children's fiction in 2016 were 28%, adult fiction were

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main membership pattern accurately: adults aged 18–64 are the largest group at 51%, and those aged 65 and over are the smallest at 12%. You also describe the overall rise in loans and several key changes across the period. However, the account of the loan trend is not fully precise: loans rose from about 19,000 in 2009 to 20,600 in 2010, and the 2016 figure was about 21,700. More importantly, the final comparison of loan categories is incomplete and inaccurate: children’s fiction was 38%, not 28%, and the sentence about adult fiction is left unfinished. The overview is relevant, but fuller and more accurate reporting of the category data would make coverage more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to membership figures and then loan trends. Paragraphing helps distinguish the main chart information, and sequencing words such as “before,” “then” and “throughout” guide the reader through time. However, the final paragraph stops abruptly after “adult fiction were,” leaving the category comparison unfinished and weakening the progression. Some links are also awkward or repetitive: “The total number of loans” is repeated several times, and “declining in 2012 and returned back” makes the sequence difficult to follow. Use clearer sentence boundaries and complete the final comparison so that each paragraph develops its point coherently.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “account for,” “represented,” “fluctuated” and “upward trend.” These choices show some flexibility and generally communicate the intended meaning. There are, however, several inaccurate or unnatural expressions: “proportion of age” is not a natural description of the membership chart, “loans records” is unclear, and “2016 ledger” is an unsuitable label for the table. “Catagorised” is also misspelled, while “returned back” is redundant. The unfinished phrase “children’s fiction in 2016 were 28%” further limits precision. To strengthen this area, choose standard chart language such as “age distribution,” “loan figures” and “the table shows,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “where children’s and adult’s fiction’s accounted for the most of it” and a sequence of events linked with “before.” Most of the main information remains understandable, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. For example, “Adults aged between 13–17 account” shifts into the present tense while the data refer to 2016, and “Children’s fiction in 2016 were 28%” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The opening sentence also has an awkward structure, and the final sentence is incomplete. Review tense consistency, agreement, and sentence completion; these corrections would make your varied structures more controlled.

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