Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given pie chart illutrates information the age of library members. The table shows the percentage of loans by category in 2016. The bar chart illustrates the total number of loans between the year 2007 to 2016 in little chanfont library.

According to the given pie chart it is obvious that 51% member of library who were the age of between 18 to 64. The second highest ratio of children was 22%. However, young adults between the age of 13 to 17 was the 15% ratio of the membership of library. On the other hand 12% member of library who were 65 and above in 2016 in little chanfot library.

It is apparently seen that the total percentage of loans children's fiction 38% loan. children's non fiction 6% loan. while the proportion of dvd children can get 1% loan. while young adults who was loan in 2016 by 2%. On the other hand adult fiction can got the ratio of 38%loan. Adult non fiction 13%loan. Besides that 2% Adult can get loan in the proportion of audio books.

Now turning the details of bar chart in 2007 the 15000 amount was loan. Between 2008 to 2016 The amount of loan significantly increased and reached 21000 at the end of the period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify all three visuals and report several key figures accurately, including the 51% share of members aged 18–64 and the 38% shares for both fiction categories. However, the response only partly summarises the main features. The overview of loans over time is incomplete: it says the total “significantly increased” to 21,000, but the chart shows fluctuations after the initial rise and a final value of about 21,700. The description also gives little comparison or synthesis across the data, and the loan-category figures are mostly listed one by one. To strengthen the report, highlight the dominant adult age group and fiction categories, then describe the overall rise and later variation in loans with accurate start and end values.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: it introduces the visuals, then discusses membership, loan categories and the time series in separate paragraphs. This makes the information easy to locate, and transitions such as “On the other hand” and “Now turning the details” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, some linking is mechanical or repetitive, particularly the repeated “On the other hand” and “while,” and the category paragraph reads largely as a sequence of figures rather than a connected comparison. The final paragraph is also very brief and does not develop the trend. Use fewer formulaic transitions and group related figures—for example, compare the two 38% fiction categories with the smaller remaining shares—to create smoother progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “percentage,” “proportion,” “ratio,” “increased” and “reached,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “the 15% ratio of the membership,” “can get 1% loan” and “the 15000 amount was loan.” Spelling errors, including “illutrates” and inconsistent spellings of Little Chalfont, also reduce precision. Aim for standard chart-reporting phrases such as “accounted for,” “made up” and “the number of loans,” and check spelling and category names carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you compare the data rather than repeatedly describing each figure as a “ratio” or “loan.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentence forms, including “According to the given pie chart it is obvious that…” and “Between 2008 to 2016 the amount of loan significantly increased…,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and sentence construction appear in phrases such as “51% member … who were the age,” “young adults … was the 15% ratio,” and “adult fiction can got the ratio.” Articles, plurals and prepositions are also often missing or incorrectly used, making some sentences difficult to follow. Most statements rely on simple patterns, with limited accurate variety. Practise building clear comparisons with a subject and verb—for example, “Adults aged 18–64 accounted for 51% of members”—and use past-tense forms consistently when reporting the 2016 data.

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