Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the age groups of library members in 2016. The bar chart compare the number of loans taken in total between 2007 and 2016. The table show the categories of loan taken in 2016.

Overall, Adults who are in between the age of 18-64 covers the significant portion as the library member while adults of age 65 and above hold the lowest proportion. Number of loan in 2016 is the highest among all the years. Whereas, In year 2007 the number of loan was at its lowest.

The adults under 64 holds the dominant proportion 51 percent as the library members.In contrast, adults who are at the age of 65 or above has the minimum proportion only 12 percent.

Furthermore, Childern's fiction and the Adult fiction are 2 categories that contains the same amount of proportion in 2016. whereas, Childern's DVDs has the least proportion of loan with 1 percent only. In addition to that, Significant number of loans were taken in 2016 which are approximately arount 23000 while in the year 2017 it is hardly near 16000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main age-group contrast and report that adults aged 18–64 account for 51% of members, while those aged 65 and over make up 12%. You also correctly note the equal 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction and the 1% share for children’s DVDs. However, the overview is incomplete: the loan total rises overall from 2007 to 2016, with fluctuations, rather than simply being highest in 2016 and lowest in 2007. The final comparison misreports the chart: 2016 is about 21,700 loans, not 23,000, and the comparison is with 2007, not 2017. The table’s other categories and the membership figures for children and young adults are also omitted, so coverage is uneven.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for membership and loan categories. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the progression is weakened by repetition: the 51% and 12% membership figures appear in both the overview and the next paragraph, while the loan trend is not developed in a clear sequence. Connectors such as “Furthermore,” “whereas,” and “In addition to that” are used, but some links are awkward or do not clearly show the relationship between points. The final sentence also shifts abruptly from the table to the loan chart. Grouping related figures and describing the trend chronologically would make the organisation more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “categories,” “dominant,” and “least,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons you intend. However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “covers the significant portion,” “proportion of loan,” and “number of loan.” Spelling errors, including “Childern’s” and “arount,” also reduce accuracy. Some wording is repetitive, particularly “proportion” and “number of loans.” Aim for precise, natural phrases such as “accounted for,” “share of total loans,” and “loan total,” and check spelling carefully. This would broaden and improve control of the vocabulary used to describe data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “In contrast” and a clause beginning “while.” The main information is usually understandable, but errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries, and punctuation are evident. For example, “The bar chart compare” and “The table show” need singular verb forms, while “adults … has” should agree with the plural subject. In “the library members.In contrast,” a space is needed after the full stop, and “whereas” should not begin a new sentence with a lower-case letter. The final sentence also combines comparisons in a confusing structure. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and build clear sentences around one comparison at a time.

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