Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts below illustrate information about a public library in a town which is called Little Chalfont based on 3 different chart.The pie chart shows the age of library members in 2016.While, the table demonstates about the total loans by catagory in the same year and the bar chart provides the information about total number of loans between 2007 and 2016.

In pie chart, The highest attended members are adults group from 18 to 64 with 51 While children came with a significant number of 22 but, young adults from 13 to 17 and older edults between 65 and over came with a small figure of 12 and 15 Moreover, In the table, Children's and adults fiction accounted for the highest figure of loan with 38% each While, adult audio books, young adults, chindren's DVDs and children's non-fiction came with a small number of 2%, 1%, 6% but, adult non-fiction came with a significant number of 13% Finally, The last bar chart shows that in 2007 the total number of loan was around 16000 However, it fluctuated through some years and ended up in 2016 with around 22000 which seemed the highest number among other years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover all three visuals and identify several important features, including the largest membership group, the equal 38% shares for the two fiction categories, and the overall rise in loans. However, the response is only partially developed: it gives no clear overview bringing the main patterns together, and the loan trend is reduced to “fluctuated” without describing its changes. Some figures are also misreported: young adults account for 15% and members aged 65 and over 12%, but these are reversed in your account. The category figures are listed unclearly, making it difficult to match each percentage to its category. State the main patterns accurately and support them with selected comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response follows a generally understandable sequence: it introduces the visuals, then discusses membership, loan categories and the time series. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the organisation is weakened by the absence of a distinct overview and by long, crowded sentences that combine several comparisons. Connectors such as “While,” “Moreover,” and “Finally” are used mechanically, and some references are unclear—for example, the list of small loan percentages does not clearly pair each figure with its category. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and details, and group related figures into shorter sentences with precise linking and reference.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “fluctuated,” and “total number of loans,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or awkward, such as “highest attended members,” “came with a significant number,” and “small figure.” Repetition of “came with” and “number” also makes the description less precise. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “demonstates,” “catagory,” “edults,” and “chindren’s,” which reduce the accuracy of the report. Aim for standard chart language such as “represented,” “accounted for,” “share,” and “rose,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and use some linking clauses, but control is uneven. Several sentences run together without appropriate full stops, as in the opening description and the paragraph beginning “In pie chart”; capitalisation after sentence boundaries is also inconsistent. There are errors in articles and sentence patterns, for example “In pie chart” and “the total number of loan was around 16000.” The comparison beginning “While children came…” is not formed clearly, and the final clause “which seemed the highest number” has an unclear grammatical reference. Use a wider mix of controlled simple and complex sentences, with clear sentence boundaries and accurate plural and article forms.

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