Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrated the information about the public library , while the chart showed the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016

overall the maximum membership of library was covered by adults following by young adults and children fiction had highest in category while children's DVDs had the lowest and in 2016 the total number of loans is on peaked

The membership of library of adults was accounted for 51% while , the 22% covered by children the young adults seen to be less the quarter at 15 percent . The young adults is low as at 12% .

In the total loans of category children's fiction had the highest percentage accouted for 38% Adult fiction is same as childre's fiction. while , the children's DVDs had the lowest at 1% followed by young adults at 2%

The Total number of loans in 2007 was 16000 gradually increased in 2008 almost 19000 and then fluctuated between 20000 and 23000 from 2011 to 2016

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three visuals and identify several important features, including the adult membership share of 51%, the matching 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction, and the low 1% figure for children’s DVDs. Your overview also recognises that loans rose overall, although “is on peaked” does not clearly describe the trend. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the 15% young-adult membership is not “less the quarter” in a useful comparison, and “The young adults is low as at 12%” mislabels the 12% figure, which belongs to members aged 65 and over. The loan trend is broadly captured, but the final years are described too generally. More precise reporting and a clearer overview would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of membership, loan categories, and the time series. This helps the reader identify which chart is being discussed. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and links between ideas are often mechanical or incomplete. For example, the overview joins several features with “while” without clearly distinguishing them, and the final paragraph moves from category percentages to the loan trend without a clear transition. Punctuation and inconsistent capitalisation also interrupt the flow. Use one focused paragraph for each visual, connect comparisons explicitly, and make sure each sentence develops the point introduced by the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “membership,” “percentage,” “fluctuated,” and “accounted for,” so the reader can generally understand the subject and comparisons. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “maximum membership … was covered by adults,” “children fiction,” and “is on peaked.” “The young adults is low” also makes the intended category difficult to interpret. Spelling and word-form slips such as “accouted” and “childre's” reduce precision. Aim for standard chart-reporting phrases and check category names carefully; this will make your descriptions more natural and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the main information is usually recoverable. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, particularly in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation. Examples include “The young adults is low” and “the total number of loans is on peaked,” where the verb forms do not fit the meaning. Several clauses are joined with commas or “while” without a complete, well-punctuated structure, as in the sentence beginning “In the total loans of category.” There is also inconsistent use of capital letters at sentence starts. Practise forming clear subject–verb sentences and use past tense consistently when describing the 2007–2016 data.

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