Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the information of a public library called Little Chalfont. Every age person is allowed to go there. Moreover the other chart compares data of total numbers of loans between 2007 and 2016.

In the library, children member percentage is about 22%, the young adults between 13 and 17 members are approximately 15%. Meanwhile, adults between 18 and 64 age are about 51% it is the main highlight members of the public library. The lowest members of 12% are the age 65 and older than it in the library. The table chart shows the loan category of 2016. The children and adult fiction are on same percentage of 38 which is the highest one in the list. Somehow, there’s a half difference in the percentage of kids and mature people non-fiction which is 6% for kids and 13% for adults.

The young adults and adult audio books are about 2% in this list while children’s DVDs consists of 1% only. Now let’s move towards chart data about number of loans between 2007 and 2016. It starts from more than 15000 loans in 2007 which gradually increases until 2011 and reached about 22000. Then it substantially reduced in next two years and reached approximately 19000. After it, it rises again until 2016 and reached 23000 numbers of loans.

To conclude, the library and loans are crucial for the members of society as books in the libraries educate them and loan instalments prepare their mindset to manage their expenses in a proper manner or way.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover all three visuals and report several key figures accurately, including the 51% share of members aged 18–64, the equal 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction, and the broad rise and fall in loans. However, some details are inaccurate: loans peaked at about 21,700 in 2016, not 23,000, and the 2011 figure was about 21,000 rather than 22,000. The description of the trend also misses the modest recovery after 2013. There is no clear overview of the main patterns, and the final comment about education and managing expenses is not supported by the charts. A concise overview and more precise reporting of the loan trend would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a generally understandable order: it introduces the visuals, describes membership and loan categories, then turns to the time series. Paragraphing helps separate these sections, and transitions such as “Meanwhile” and “Then” guide the reader through comparisons and changes. However, the progression is weakened by the absence of a clear overview near the beginning, while “To conclude” introduces an unrelated general comment rather than summarising the chart findings. Some linking is mechanical, and references such as “the other chart” and “it” are not always precise. Organise the response around an overview followed by grouped details, and use transitions to show meaningful comparisons rather than simply marking each new section.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the main information, including “percentage,” “loan category,” “fiction,” and “non-fiction.” There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “gradually increases” and “substantially reduced.” However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise: “Every age person,” “main highlight members,” “half difference,” and “reached 23000 numbers of loans.” “The library and loans are crucial” is also an unsupported evaluative phrase for a chart summary. Use standard chart-reporting expressions such as “the proportion of members,” “the largest age group,” and “the number of loans rose to.” This would improve precision and make the vocabulary more appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, and the reader can generally follow the comparisons and trends. Some sentence patterns are controlled, for example, “The children and adult fiction are on same percentage of 38,” though this still needs an article and more accurate agreement. Other sentences contain errors in clause structure and agreement: “adults between 18 and 64 age are about 51% it is the main highlight members” joins clauses without suitable punctuation, while “it substantially reduced” uses an incorrect verb form for the trend. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses using “while,” “whereas,” or “which.”

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