Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie chart shows the age distribution of the members of a library who belongs to a small city called Little Chalfont in 2016 across four different age groups. The table displays the percentage of total loans in seven categories over these period. The bar chart illustrates the total number of loans taken by the people in this town between 2007 and 2016.

Overall, the majority of library members include the adults ranging between 18 to 64 years. The largest loan categories were children's fiction and adult fiction with equal percentages, whereas the least percentage category of loans were from children's DVDs. Over the period of nine years, the highest number of loans were in 2016.

The adults of age between 18 to 64 years contributed about 51% to total library members, followed by children 22%, young adults of age between 13 to 17 years 15% and adults of age 65 and over contributed 12% of total library members in 2016.

The total loans was highest, but equal in the categories of children's fiction and adult fiction., to about 38%. The adult non-fiction accounted 13%, followed by children's non-fiction 6%, minor percentages of other categories like adult audio books, yound adults and children's DVDs.

The total number of loans was lowest in 2007, at about 16,000, rising in 200 to 19,000 and remaining same in 2009. Then it rose further from 2010 to 2012 to approximately 21,000, with minor fluctuation. Then, it drops off in 2013 to nearly 19,000, and finally peaked at 22,000 in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover all three visuals and provide a clear overview: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, fiction leads the loan categories, and total loans peak in 2016. The membership figures and the main category percentages are accurately reported, including the equal 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction. The trend description also captures the overall rise, the dip in 2013 and the final peak. Some details are less fully reported: the small loan categories are grouped together without giving their individual percentages, and the 2010–2012 movement is described as rising despite a slight fall in 2012. More precise reporting of these details would make the account more fully supported and avoid slight over-generalisation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is organised into a clear introduction, overview and separate paragraphs for the membership, loan categories and time series. This gives the reader a logical route through the three visuals, and sequencing phrases such as “followed by,” “Then” and “finally” help show comparisons and chronology. However, the repeated use of “Then” makes the final paragraph somewhat mechanical, and the sentence beginning “The total loans was highest” contains a punctuation break that interrupts the flow. The small categories are also bundled into a vague list rather than connected through a clear comparison. To strengthen cohesion, vary the transitions and use more precise links between figures, while keeping each paragraph focused on a distinct visual.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task vocabulary, including “age distribution,” “accounted,” “contributed,” “fluctuation” and “peaked,” which helps communicate the main comparisons. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, however: “the age distribution of the members of a library who belongs” is cumbersome, “the highest number of loans were in 2016” is not a natural way to describe the chart, and “minor percentages” is imprecise. There is also a spelling error in “yound adults.” Aim for concise, conventional chart language such as “members aged…,” “loan volume reached a peak,” and “the remaining categories accounted for smaller shares.” More accurate collocations and careful proofreading would improve precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including comparisons and time clauses, and the overall meaning remains clear. Some grammatical errors persist, particularly with subject–verb agreement and tense: “the table displays” is followed by “over these period,” “The total loans was,” and “Then, it drops off” after a past-time description. There are also errors in sentence construction and punctuation, as in “The total loans was highest, but equal in the categories…., to about 38%,” where the clause is awkwardly joined and punctuated. Articles and prepositions in phrases such as “contributed about 51% to total library members” also need more control. Check agreement, maintain past tense for the historical data, and proofread sentence boundaries.

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