Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart presents information about a public library in a town called little chlfont and the bar graph compares the total number of laons from 2007 to 2016.

Overall, it is clear that adults between 18-64 has highest number of users, while age group above 65 recorded lowest number of users and in 2016 their were highest number of loans compared to 2007 which was accounted for lowest.

Age group of 18-64 covers the half of the proportion, while young adults of 65 and above were least number of users accounted for 12%. Children consist the almost one-fourth part of the total proprtion at 22% in 2016. Moreover age group of 13-17 were recorded for 15% at same period. Children's fiction and adult fiction have highest number category, both accounted for 38% respectively. While, childrem's DVDs has least number of loans accounted for 1%.

In 2007, there were least number of loans at 16000. every year it has fluctuations. The loans were stable in 2008 and 2009 at 16000 loans, it has rise to 22000 in 2010, while in 2013 loans experience decrease to 18000 in 2014. In last 24000 loans were inserted in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main chart types and provide an overview, correctly identifying adults aged 18–64 as the largest membership group and noting that fiction categories dominate loans. However, some figures and comparisons are inaccurate: the oldest group is 12%, but the smallest membership group is adults aged 65 and over, not “young adults of 65 and above”; young adults are aged 13–17 and make up 15%. The loan trend is also misreported: 2008 and 2009 were about 19,000, not 16,000, and the total rose to roughly 21,700 in 2016, rather than 24,000. The overview’s claim that 2016 had the highest total is accurate. More precise reporting of the trend and clearer separation of membership from loan categories would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph about membership and loan categories, and a final paragraph on annual loans. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several links are mechanical or confusing. For example, “Moreover age group of 13–17 were recorded for 15% at same period” does not connect smoothly to the preceding comparison, while “In last 24000 loans were inserted in 2016” is difficult to interpret as a concluding trend statement. The final paragraph also jumps between years without consistently showing the direction of change. Grouping the two pie-chart findings together and describing the line of annual totals in chronological order would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “fluctuations,” and “stable,” and the reader can generally identify the categories being discussed. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning unclear. “Loans were inserted” is not an appropriate way to describe borrowing totals, and “highest number category” is an awkward description of the largest loan shares. There are also spelling errors in key words, such as “laons,” “chlfont,” “proprtion,” and “childrem’s.” Use precise terms such as “share,” “loan total,” and “category,” and check spelling carefully. Avoid repeating “number of users” when “membership share” would be more accurate for percentages.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons and clauses introduced by “while” and “which.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, articles, tense, and sentence construction sometimes make the relationships between figures hard to follow. Examples include “adults between 18-64 has highest number,” “their were highest number,” and “Children consist the almost one-fourth part.” The sentence beginning “In 2007, there were least number” also needs an article, and “every year it has fluctuations” shifts awkwardly between past and present. Practise accurate comparative structures and past-tense reporting, for example, “The total rose to about 21,000 in 2011, then fell in 2013.” More reliable sentence patterns would make your data easier to understand.

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