Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given pie chart depicts the information about the ratio of different age group who are members of library, while tabular shows the total loans taken over various categories in 2016. The bar chart illustrstes the number of loans taken from 2007 until 2016.

In general review,the majority of member of library were adults. The highest proportion of loans were taken on adult and children fiction.

It is evident from the chart that in 2016 around 22% of children were the member of library, whereas the ratio of young adults were 15% and individuals over age 65 were 12%. In addition to this, 16,000 loans were taken in 2007 and this number gradually increased to 21,000 in 2011. There was fluctuation pattern followed until 2014. Loans taken in 2016 was 22,000.

Probing ahead, total proportion of loans got on the basis of adult non fiction and children non fiction was 13% and 6% respectively. The least percentile loans was taken over children DVDs, young adults and adult audio books. around 38% of loans got over children fiction and adult fiction.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three visuals and identify two important features: adults form the largest membership group, and adult and children’s fiction each account for the largest share of loans. Several figures are reported accurately, including the age-group proportions and the 38%, 13%, and 6% loan shares. The loan trend is also broadly described, but the account is incomplete: it rises overall from about 15,700 in 2007 to 21,700 in 2016, with a dip after 2011 and a subsequent recovery, rather than simply showing fluctuation until 2014. The overview would be stronger if it highlighted this overall stability and rise. Also, “the majority” of members were adults is imprecise: adults aged 18–64 were the largest group, at 51%, not an overwhelming majority of all adult age categories combined.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a brief overview, and two paragraphs covering membership and loan data. This makes the main information easy to locate. However, progression within the data paragraphs is sometimes loose. For example, the sentence about loans in 2007–2016 appears in the paragraph about age groups, while the final paragraph returns to the loan-category table. Grouping all trend information together and then discussing the two 2016 breakdowns would create a more logical sequence. Linking phrases such as “In general review” and “Probing ahead” sound mechanical or unclear, and the reference in “this number” could be more precise. Use straightforward transitions such as “Overall,” “By contrast,” and “Meanwhile” to guide comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “fluctuation,” “fiction,” and “non-fiction,” and the reader can generally understand your comparisons. There are, however, several inaccurate or unnatural choices that reduce precision. “Loans taken” is repeated and is not the most natural description of library borrowing; “loans made” or “items borrowed” would fit better. “The least percentile loans” is unclear, and “ratio of different age group” is an awkward phrase. Spelling errors such as “illustrstes” also affect accuracy. Aim for consistent, natural collocations and use “share” or “percentage” for the category figures rather than mixing these with “ratio” and “percentile.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, plurals, and subject–verb agreement. For example, “different age group who are members” needs plural agreement and a clearer relative clause, while “the majority of member” should be “the majority of members.” In “the ratio of young adults were 15%,” the subject and verb do not agree; “the proportion of young adults was 15%” is a sounder structure. Tense and sentence construction also need attention in “Loans taken in 2016 was 22,000.” Check agreement and articles when revising, and use a wider range of accurately controlled sentence patterns.

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