Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart showing the details about a public library in a town called little chalfont.

Here are some information about the little chalfont library, the ages of library members, total loans by different ages category and total number of loans in different years.

Furthermore, Here are different age groups of library in 2016 from childern to 65 and over and the numbers of these age groups there were 51 members from adults 22 members from childerns and 15 from young adult age 13 to 17 and only 12 member of adults 65 and over which is less than from all age age group. Morever, in table there are percenatge of fiction for loan catogery in 2016 childern and adult fiction both took loan of 76% and remaing percentage took by others age groups. Although, there are the amount of loans from 2007 to 2016 which shows that the loan amount were between 15000 to 22000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three information types and include several relevant figures, such as 51% for adults aged 18–64 and 38% each for children’s and adult fiction. However, the response gives only a limited account of the main features: it does not clearly summarise the overall dominance of adults among members or describe how loans changed over time beyond saying they were between 15,000 and 22,000. The statement that fiction “both took loan of 76%” is inaccurate: each category accounts for 38%, while together they make up 76%. The response is also five words below the required 150-word minimum. Develop a clear overview and report key comparisons and the loan trend more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response mentions the charts in a broadly sensible order—membership ages, loan categories, then annual loans—and uses basic links such as “Furthermore,” “Moreover,” and “Although.” However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the opening repeats the task rather than establishing a concise overview. Several sentences run together, making relationships between details difficult to follow; for example, the long sentence beginning “Furthermore, Here are different age groups” combines several membership figures without clear separation. “Although” also introduces no contrasting clause, so the connection is incomplete. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs, using linking words only where they accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “age groups,” “fiction,” “percentage,” and “loans,” so the reader can generally identify the subject of each chart. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the report less clear, including “childern,” “percenatge,” “catogery,” and “remaing.” Phrases such as “loan amount” and “took loan” are also unnatural in this context; “number of loans” and “accounted for” would be more appropriate. Repetition of “age groups” and “members” further limits precision. Check spelling carefully and learn common chart-reporting collocations so that comparisons can be expressed accurately and naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic structures to report figures, but control is inconsistent. The opening fragment, “The chart showing the details…,” is not a complete sentence, and “Here are some information” has an agreement error. In “there were 51 members from adults,” the sentence pattern is unclear, while “which is less than from all age age group” is difficult to interpret. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly after “Furthermore” and “Moreover,” and several ideas are joined into long sentences without clear boundaries. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and separate each comparison with accurate punctuation. A wider range of controlled sentence patterns would make the figures easier to understand.

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