Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts provide information about the library members and number of loans they provided to different age groups of people from 2007 to 2016. Overall, it is apparent that the highest proportion of adults 18-64 years old were library members and maximum loan given to children fiction and adult fiction in 2016. In addition the total number of loans fluctuated throughtout the years.

To begin with, more than half adults of 18-64 years old were the member of library, while children accounted for 22% and young adults were slightly higher than adults above 65 in 2016. In addition, children fiction and adult fiction loans were same in 2016 contributed 38% while the credit for young adults and adult audio books was 2% . Moreover,the mortrage for adult non-fiction was significantly higher than children non-fiction.

The total number of loans in 2007 was slightly higher than 15,000 and after that it increased with tha passage of time it reached to approximately 21,000 in 2011 and then dropped slightly to just under 20,000 in 2013 and then improved with the time duration. Furtermore, it reached to nearly 22,000 in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response covers all three visuals and gives a relevant overview: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, fiction leads the 2016 loan categories, and total loans fluctuate over time. Most reported figures are consistent with the data, including the 38% shares for both fiction categories and the rise to about 21,700 loans in 2016. The account of the line graph is reasonably detailed, but the membership and category comparisons are less fully developed: for example, it does not report the 12% share for older adults or the 1% share for children’s DVDs, and “significantly higher” for adult versus children’s non-fiction could be made precise (13% versus 6%). A more complete selection of key comparisons would strengthen the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by discussion of membership and loan categories, then the trend in total loans. This gives the reader a coherent route through the visuals, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “To begin with,” and “Moreover” help signal relationships. However, the second paragraph combines two different charts, and some transitions are mechanical or unclear. The final trend description also strings several stages together in one long sentence, making the sequence harder to follow. Separate the membership figures from the category shares, and use shorter sentences to distinguish the rise, decline, and later recovery. This would make the progression more controlled and the comparisons easier to locate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses enough topic vocabulary to communicate the main information, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “fluctuated,” and “approximately.” It also attempts more formal reporting language. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “maximum loan given,” “the credit for young adults,” and “the mortrage for adult non-fiction.” Spelling errors including “throughtout,” “Furtermore,” and “tha” are noticeable and reduce precision. Some phrases are also repetitive, particularly “increased with the passage of time” and “improved with the time duration.” Choose standard chart-reporting expressions and check spelling carefully; precise terms such as “share,” “accounted for,” and “loan total” would make the comparisons more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is some variety in sentence forms, including clauses linked with “while” and “after that,” and the main trends remain understandable. However, errors in sentence construction and grammatical control are evident in examples such as “more than half adults … were the member,” “children fiction and adult fiction loans were same,” and “it increased … it reached.” These involve missing articles or prepositions, number agreement, and run-on sentence structure. The opening sentence also has an unclear relationship between the library members and the loans. Use accurate plural forms and articles, and divide the long trend sentence into separate stages. More consistent control of these patterns, alongside the existing attempts at complex sentences, would improve clarity.

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