Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts and table provide information about the proportion of age distribution among library memebrs, total loan by category and the number of loans availed by the members of the little chalfont library, from 2007 to 2016.

Overall, the majority of the library memebrs were adults, while the lowest proportion was accounted for adults of age 65 or more. In 2016, children's fiction and adults fiction both had the highest proportion of loans. Whereas the lowest proportion of loan was recorded for children's dvds. The toal number of loans remained almost identical from 2010 to 2016, with slight fluctation.

The highest proportion of library was recorded 51% by adults from age 18 to 64, followed by, the second highest share of 22% of children. Whereas, the proportion of adults aged 13 to 17 and adults aged 65 or more accounted for 12 and 15 percent respectively. Moreover, children fiction and adult fiction made up the highest share of loans by 38% each. while, children dvds, young adults, and adult audio books had the least contribution of 1% or 2%. The children's non-fiction accounts for 6%, whereas adults non-fictions had a proportion of 13 percent loan.

In 2007, slightly more than 15,000 loans were availed, which slightly rose to almot 18,000 in 2008 and 2009.

Overall, the number of loans availed were almost consistent untill 2006, with a slight decline in 2013.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main patterns: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, fiction accounts for the largest loan shares, and borrowing is broadly stable in the later years. Several figures are reported accurately, including the 51% adult membership share and the 38% shares for both fiction categories. However, the age figures are confused: children are 12%, young adults are 22%, and adults aged 65+ are 15%, not the values stated. The trend description also omits the rise to about 21,700 in 2016 and incorrectly says loans were consistent “until 2006”; the chart ends in 2016. The overview is relevant, but these misreadings and the limited account of the decade leave some key information unclear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs covering the membership and loan data. This gives the reader a basic route through the charts. However, progression is weakened by repetition and by the final paragraph stopping after the early years rather than tracing the trend through 2016. Linking words are sometimes awkward or overused: “Whereas” begins a fragment, and “Moreover” and “while” do not consistently connect complete ideas. The overview also repeats information later without adding much. Grouping the age figures together and then describing the loan categories and the full time trend in a clear sequence would make the organisation more coherent and the comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “share,” “contribution” and “slight decline.” These choices help communicate comparisons, although some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “loans availed,” “proportion of library,” and “had the least contribution.” There are also spelling errors, including “memebrs,” “toal,” “fluctation” and “almot,” which reduce accuracy. Some terms are repeated, particularly “proportion” and “loans.” Aim for precise chart language and check spelling carefully; for example, use “number of loans borrowed” rather than “loans availed,” and “the smallest share of loans” rather than “least contribution.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while” and “whereas,” and the main message is generally understandable. However, some sentence structures are incomplete or awkward. “Whereas the lowest proportion of loan was recorded…” is a fragment, as is “while, children dvds…”; these should be joined to a complete sentence or rewritten. There are also errors in agreement and number, such as “the number of loans availed were,” and inconsistent article and plural use in phrases such as “children fiction” and “adult non-fictions.” Punctuation around linking words is also unreliable. More consistently complete sentences and careful checking of agreement would improve control.

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