Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This chart is pie chart and bar chart. This chart shows library loan data from 2007 to 2016. The library name was little chalfont library. In 2016, The age of members were divided into four group. The group was children,young adults 13-17,adults 18-64,adults 65 and over. The children's fiction was 38 percent loan, children's non-fiction was 6 percent loan, children's DVDs was 1 percent loan, young adults was 2 percent loan, adult fiction was 38 percent loan, adult non-fiction was 13 percent loan and adult audio books was 2 percent loan in 2016.
The 16000 number of loans in 2007, 19000 loans in 2008 and 2009, 21000 loans in 2010, 21500 loans in 2011, 21000 loans in 2012, 19500 loans in 2013, 21000 loans in 2014, 22000 loans in 2015 and 23000 loans in 2016.The highest number of loans was 23000 in 2016 and the lowest number of loans was 16000 in 2007. This chart shows number of loans was increased from 2007 to 2016.
In Conclusion, The adults 18-64 member was taken loans more than other. The chart shows number of loans by member.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You include information from the membership, loan-category and yearly-loan visuals, and correctly identify adult fiction and children’s fiction as the largest loan categories at 38% each. You also note the overall rise in loans across the period. However, the age-group figures are listed without their percentages, so the reader cannot see the key contrast that adults aged 18–64 made up 51% of members. Several yearly figures are inaccurate: for example, 2011 is about 21,000 rather than 21,500, and 2016 is about 21,700 rather than 23,000. The conclusion that adults aged 18–64 took more loans is not established by the charts, which show membership proportions, not loans by age. Select and compare the main features more clearly, and distinguish membership from borrowing data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the charts, reports category information, then describes the yearly trend and ends with a conclusion. This gives the reader some organisation, and the time-series details are kept together. However, the opening repeats “This chart” and the category information is presented as a long list rather than grouped into meaningful comparisons. The transition to “In Conclusion” does not provide a clear summary of the main features, and “This chart shows number of loans by member” is unclear. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and key details, and connect comparisons explicitly—for example, contrast the two 38% categories with the much smaller shares. Clearer referencing would also help readers follow which chart each statement describes.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “fiction,” “non-fiction,” “audio books,” “members” and “loans,” so the subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or unnatural, such as “was 38 percent loan” and “The 16000 number of loans.” “This chart” is also repeated, while “In Conclusion” does not add precise meaning. These choices sometimes make the relationships between the figures less clear. Aim for accurate reporting expressions and varied terms, such as “accounted for,” “share,” “total borrowing” and “rose.” Check spelling and capitalisation of the library’s name, and use standard forms such as “children’s fiction” consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
Most sentences use simple structures, and the reader can usually identify the figures being reported. However, grammatical errors occur frequently and sometimes make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “The age of members were divided into four group” has errors in agreement and number; “The 16000 number of loans in 2007” is not a complete sentence; and “The adults 18-64 member was taken loans” has problems with articles, agreement and verb construction. Capitalisation after commas and within sentences is also inconsistent. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use accurate past-tense reporting patterns, such as “Loans stood at approximately 15,700 in 2007 and rose to 19,000 in 2008.”
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